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GA Review

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Reviewer: Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk · contribs) 11:39, 31 August 2021 (UTC)[reply]


I will be reviewing this! Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 11:39, 31 August 2021 (UTC)[reply]

References

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Lead

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  • ”as a freshman, and was” – No comma needed.
  • ”Despite a slump” – “Though he slumped”
  • ”Kennedy was unable to hold his minor-league momentum with the Yankees, however, and missed most of the 2009 season with an aneurysm in his arm.” – “Kennedy spent parts of three seasons with the Yankees, missing most of the 2009 season with an aneurysm in his arm.”
  • ” After two strong seasons in San Diego, a hamstring issue soured Kennedy's 2015 performance” – “He spent two strong seasons in San Diego before a hamstring issue soured his 2015 performance.” End the sentence there.
  • ” and he opted to become a free agent at the end of the year, allowing him to sign with Kansas City. These injuries continued for several more seasons until the Royals moved Kennedy to the bullpen for the 2019 season.” – “He opted to become a free agent at the end of the year, then signed with the Royals. Injuries continued to plague him until the Royals moved him to the bullpen for the 2019 season.”
  • ”leading MLB in saves” – “recording 30 saves that season.” (I’d also recommend mentioning the save total in the text later on.)
  • ” Kennedy signed with the Rangers, under new management from his former teammate Chris Young, in 2021.” – “Kennedy signed with the Rangers in 2021.” – The Young thing’s good to mention in the body but probably too specific for this article’s lead.
  • No comma needed after setup man

Early life

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College career

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Minor leagues

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New York Yankees

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Arizona Diamondbacks

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San Diego Padres

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Kansas City Royals

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Texas Rangers

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Philadelphia Phillies

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Pitching style

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Personal life

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Nice start as usual; mostly minor fixes. Let me know when you’ve finished, and I’ll give it another look! (Still think he should’ve won the 2011 NL Cy Young Award, but oh well…) Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 12:34, 31 August 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Sanfranciscogiants17 I think I hit everything! As for the Cy Young, well, Kershaw was obviously for optic reasons, but I'm not going to say Kennedy was more deserving than two of the Four Aces ;) — GhostRiver 14:12, 1 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]
GhostRiver Looks good now, passing. Nice job on a long article! Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 02:37, 2 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]