Talk:Instant Replay Game/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Harper J. Cole (talk · contribs) 20:26, 11 November 2022 (UTC)[reply]

A lot of NFL game articles have pictures of the stadium (e.g. Clock Play, No Punt Game, Freezer Bowl. Probably worth adding in a Lambeau field picture for consistency.

4th down touchdown pass... Here "4th-down" should be hyphenated, as it modifies a noun.

The instant replay official... This phrase is repeated; you can just say "He" the second time.

including winning the Super Bowl during the 1984 NFL season... It was the 1985 season when they won it. I'd also suggest the more specific "at the end of" rather than "during".

Because the Bears and Packers were in the same division, they were scheduled to play each other twice a season: once in Green Bay and once in Chicago.... I'd replace "were" with "are" both times, as this is still the case today. Then begin the next sentence with "In 1989, their first match-up was scheduled..."

The fourth quarter saw the Bears and Packers go back-and-forth,... Here "back and forth" isn't hyphenated, as it's not describing anything else (e.g. "a back-and-forth game" would be hyphenated).

The Packers drove down the field... Two consecutive sentences beginning with "The Packers"; the second one can begin simply "They".

Majkowski snapped the ball... Typically the Center is the one said to have snapped the ball; I suggest "received the snap".

As he approached the line of scrimmage,... I'd suggest blue-linking line of scrimmage, as it's a central component of this play.

he threw the ball to Shannon Sharpe... Also blue link Sterling Sharpe, as it's the first time he's mentioned in the body of the article.

After further review, we have a reversal. Touchdown. Unless there's a particular convention to the contrary for these inset boxes, I'd expect quote marks around this bit.

Boxscore and Starting Lineups from Pro Football Reference... Again, a space is needed in "box score". Also, no need to capitalize "starting lineups", and Pro-Football-Reference.com can be blue-linked.

Box scores usually have drive details where available (e.g. the current Packers season. You can add those from this source.[1]

his proclivity for dramatic and sometimes miraculous finishes.... "Miraculous" seems a bit hyperbolic for an encyclopedia.

This victory over the Bears was one of a then-record four, one-point victories for the 1989 Packers.... No comma after "four".

The rule for an illegal forward pass was also changed to make it easier to make a determination, now stating that the player throwing the ball and the ball itself both had to be behind the line of scrimmage to be legal.... Based on the citation, it looks like it was changed so that only the quarterback's position was relevant, with the ball not mattering any longer.

When asked about the game in 2014, Bears head coach at the time, Mike Ditka,... This wording makes it a bit unclear whether Ditka was Chicago's head coach in 1989 or in 2014.

A well-written article, just needing a few adjustments to pass.

Harper J. Cole, thanks for the thorough review! I believe I have addressed all your comments in these edits. Let me know if you have any questions or additional comments. « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @ 20:45, 12 November 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Looking good! I've promoted. Nice work on the article. Harper J. Cole (talk) 23:33, 12 November 2022 (UTC)[reply]