Talk:Irruputuncu/GA1

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Reviewer: Sainsf (talk · contribs) 07:52, 28 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Aymara iru spiny Peruvian feather grass... Potosí Department, Bolivia Is this part mentioned only in the lead? The lead is supposed to be a summary of the main article and not include things excluded from the main article.
The mountain is part of the Andean Central Volcanic Zone (CVZ) Separate this out from the rest of the line

No caps needed for "g" of "Geology" in the title
Say "Central Volcanic Zone (CVZ)" at first mention of the phrase (after lead) and try to consistently use "CVZ" throughout afterward
Wikilink ignimbrite
The oldest lava flows on the northern and eastern...around 0.097 km3 (0.023 cu mi). Source?
lateral levees and ogives may sound like jargon
Total SO2 flux from Better stick to "sulfur dioxide" for consistency

Rest looks good to me. Congrats on another beautiful article, and best of luck for your RfA! Cheers, Sainsf (talk · contribs) 14:15, 28 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]

@Sainsf: Got most issues. The etymology does indeed only appear in the lead, not sure where it should be mentioned in the article text. I don't think there is a non-jargon way to spell "lateral levees and ogives". Where specifically does the endash go?Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk, contributions) 14:57, 28 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]

No problem just create an Etymology section at the top of the article after lead. Maybe try some links for the part that looks jargon to me? And replace the hyphen with the endash. Sainsf (talk · contribs) 15:27, 28 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]
@Sainsf: Created an own etymology and name section and explained "levee" a bit - "ogive" is already linked a section farther up. Hyphen to dash is done.Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk, contributions) 17:38, 28 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]