Talk:Jalin Hyatt/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Gonzo fan2007 (talk · contribs) 21:13, 15 May 2023 (UTC)

I'll take this one. « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @ 21:13, 15 May 2023 (UTC)

Lead

• The lead should be expanded. Easily a third of the article is in the "Early life and high school career" section, yet there is really nothing in the lead about that section. Even just mentioning where he played high school ball would be better.
  • Added a sentence about high school.
• Infobox looks good, but just add alt text "Photo of Hyatt in high school wearing his helmet on a football field" or something similar would suffice.
  • Done

Early life and high school career

• and Eneveylan Hyatt who, commas after "and" and "Hyatt"
  • Done
• Hyatt would help Dutch Fork go undefeated and win state championships in 2018 and 2019, catching 3 touchdowns, including the overtime game winner in the 2019 state championship game, recommend splitting into two sentences after "2019"
  • Done
• in state, typically has a dash in it
  • Done
• Despite his success in high school, Hyatt was not recruited by in state programs Clemson and South Carolina due to their concerns of his small frame as he weighed only 153 pounds (69.3 kg) at the time, with South Carolina head coach Will Muschamp telling him "Man, you're fast, but you need to eat more peanut butter"., consider splitting into two sentences.
• Done
• then head coach, just delete "then"
  • Done

College career

• is located mere miles from his childhood home, recommend "located just a few miles"
  • Done

Professional career

• He has signed his contract. Article and section need to be updated.[1]
  • Updated

Images

• Licensing looks good on the one photo, no concerns.

References

• Be consistent with the website field. Either choose the exact website or the title of the website (i.e. either "yahoo.com" or "Yahoo"). It seems to be about 50/50 in article right now.
  • Changed all of the references to title of website except for the AL.com reference as that is the official title of website and the publication
• Ref 61 needs an access-date
  • Done
• Ref 43 should just be WATE or wate.com
  • Done
• Ref 56 is a dead link
  • Replaced link
• Consider running the archive bot on the article [2]
• Did a few spot checks, everything looks good.

Overall, really nice work. Putting on hold. « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @ 21:13, 15 May 2023 (UTC)

@Gonzo fan2007 I believe I have addressed everything. Newtothisedit (talk) 01:51, 16 May 2023 (UTC)

Nice work, passed! « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @ 14:13, 16 May 2023 (UTC)

The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.