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Reviewer: Sturmvogel 66 (talk · contribs) 12:24, 10 July 2023 (UTC)[reply]

I'll get to this shortly.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 12:24, 10 July 2023 (UTC)[reply]

  • Images appropriately licensed
  • Hyphenate short service, air raid shelter
  • A bit too much detail in the lede, I think
  • Tell readers what kind of aircraft a Vildebeest is
  • No. 103 Squadron; this was one of ten Suggest deleting "this was" to tighten the sentence
  • In the early life section, no need to link and provide the abbreviation again for Royal Air Force
  • I think this is a matter of preference. I treat the lede and article body as separate so use abbreviations for first usages in each instance. This follows my preference RE links. Zawed (talk) 10:40, 4 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]
  • There are a fair number of links redundant to the lede scattered through out the article
  • As above, I think this is a matter of preference. I link a term on first mention in lede and first mention in article body. Wiki's dupelinks tool treats the lede and article body as separate and hence doesn't pick them up as dupe links. Zawed (talk) 10:40, 4 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]
  • Performed < served ?
  • Link St Lucien Ferme, sortie, dogfight, fighter sweep, Dekheila
  • Done, except for St Lucien Ferme, for which there is no link. I have added mention of a nearby town that does have a link so that the reader can get a sense of location. Zawed (talk) 10:40, 4 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]