Talk:Jannik Sinner/GA1
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Reviewer: Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk · contribs) 13:49, 15 April 2021 (UTC)
I'll be reviewing this. Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 13:49, 15 April 2021 (UTC)
Lead
[edit]- Put (ATP) after first mention in lead of Association of Tennis Professionals
- Fixed. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 07:52, 16 April 2021 (UTC)
- Link football in the lead—I figure it’s the soccer variety, but some American readers might get confused.
- Link Italian Riviera in the lead.
- The last sentence doesn’t need a comma after backhand.
- Removed. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 07:52, 16 April 2021 (UTC)
Early life and background
[edit]- Add comma after first regular coach
- Changed to "with Heribert Mayr as his first regular coach" Sportsfan77777 (talk) 06:45, 16 April 2021 (UTC)
- Link football on first mention
- First sentence of second paragraph is a bit of a run-on and confusing. How about “At age thirteen, Sinner decided to give up skiing and football in favor of tennis. He preferred it over skiing because he preferred to compete directly against an opponent and to have more margin of error over the course of an entire match, and he preferred it over football because he wanted an individual sport where he could make his own decisions.”
- Changed to: "At age thirteen, Sinner decided to give up skiing and football in favor of tennis. He preferred it over skiing because he wanted to compete directly against an opponent and to have more margin of error over the course of an entire match. He also wanted to be in an individual sport where he could make all of the decisions, an opportunity he would not have in a team sport like football." Sportsfan77777 (talk) 06:45, 16 April 2021 (UTC)
Junior career
[edit]- Spell out ITF on first mention
- Link singles on 1st mention.
2018–19: Three Challenger titles, Next Gen champion, top 100
[edit]- First 2 paragraphs start with Sinner—could you change the start of one of them, for variety?
- Spell out ATP on first mention
- Link doubles on 1st mention.
- Also link wild card on 1st mention.
- ”with a ranking of No. 551.” – “ranked No. 551.” – more concise.
- ”6 months old” – I don’t think you need “old” since you already said “the age of”
- Removed. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 06:51, 16 April 2021 (UTC)
- Link round robin on 1st mention.
2020: French Open quarterfinal, maiden ATP title, top 40
[edit]- Don’t need comma after Purcell
- Removed. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 06:52, 16 April 2021 (UTC)
2021: Second ATP title, Masters final
[edit]- Could you add cites? I’m guessing this info has been added since you nominated the article.
- Yes, you are right. I had not written this part. I re-wrote and cited the entire section. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 09:27, 16 April 2021 (UTC)
Playing style
[edit]- Could you say who specifically compared him to Federer? WP editors seem pretty picky about this point. (If it’s too many to mention anybody, could say “compared by people such as…”)
- The links present it as a general point not attributed to anyone specific. For instance, one source says: "Although Sinner is only 19, he has already been likened to Swiss superstar Roger Federer because of his fluid style, athletic all-court movement and inner calm on the court." Sportsfan77777 (talk) 07:22, 16 April 2021 (UTC)
- Link “groundstroke” on 1st mention
- For the last sentence, specify who compared Sinner to Djokovic.
- This is meant to be an objective point (i.e. Djokovic and Sinner both have backgrounds in both skiing and tennis.) Sportsfan77777 (talk) 07:22, 16 April 2021 (UTC)
- Take out “As such” – little bit unclear.
- Changed to "In this regard". Sportsfan77777 (talk) 07:22, 16 April 2021 (UTC)
Coaches
[edit]- Link physiotherapist.
Personal life
[edit]- ”the Cesvi humanitarian organization” – since its linked, probably can just say “Cesvi”
- I specified it because the key point is that he donated to a humanitarian organization, not so much which one. And I wouldn't really expect anyone to have heard of it. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 06:57, 16 April 2021 (UTC)
- ”In parallel” – not a great transition because the concepts aren’t necessarily parallel (other than being positive and negative). The last sentence doesn’t seem related to the first two—I think it would make more sense if you took “In parallel” out and made that sentence its own paragraph.
- Removed this sentence, as someone else added it. I don't think it's reflective of any general opinion. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 06:57, 16 April 2021 (UTC)
Career statistics
[edit]- Can you cite the statistics?
References
[edit]- Ref 5 is just the news page for the website.
- Archived. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 07:05, 16 April 2021 (UTC)
- Some refs say ATP Tour; others use ATP World Tour. Either is fine, but try to make them all the same.
- Fixed the one that had "World" by mistake. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 06:54, 16 April 2021 (UTC)
- Ref 40 needs to be formatted (probably was added after you worked on this).
- Removed entirely, as mentioned above. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 06:54, 16 April 2021 (UTC)
Some stuff to work on, but other than what's been mentioned above, article seems to satisfy all the GA criteria! Let me know when these issues are addressed, and I'll give it another look. Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 20:49, 15 April 2021 (UTC)
- Sportsfan77777 Looks good, passing. Great job! Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 01:44, 19 April 2021 (UTC)