Talk:Jerry Dybzinski/GA1

GA Review

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Nominator: Wizardman (talk · contribs) 00:49, 6 August 2024 (UTC)

Reviewer: Rollinginhisgrave (talk · contribs) 16:43, 17 August 2024 (UTC)

A very neat and tidy article, thanks for the opportunity to review, hope it's okay. Rollinginhisgrave (talk) 16:43, 17 August 2024 (UTC)

Prose and content

• felt comfortable enough with his development that they unnecessary.
• Don't love the triple repetition of "the season" in 1.5 sentences from He struggled on offense during most of the season... he played during the season, consider He struggled on offense during most of the season, however -> Despite struggling on offense,
• An injury to Veryzer gave Dybzinski more playing time in the second half of the season (the this is a bit sports radio rather than Wikipedia, consider When Veryzer was injured, Dybzinski gained more playing time (the
• which gave Dybzinski the inside track bit too idiomatic
• wound up being the most was
• and decided to retire from professional baseball retired
• where he lived with his wife and three children ominous, attribute a date

Sources

Spot check:

• [1] Y
• [2] Y
• [4] Y
• [21] Y
• [23] Y

Other

• Image appropriately tagged Y
• No OR/COPYVIO Y: Earwig 13.8%, hard to paraphrase short sequences
• Stable Y
• Neutral Y
• Broad/summary style Y

Suggestions

• after a season-ending injury to Duane Kuiper -> after Duane Kuiper incurred a season-ending injury

Rollinginhisgrave (talk) 16:43, 17 August 2024 (UTC)

All issues fixed. Thanks for the review. Wizardman 21:51, 17 August 2024 (UTC)

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