Talk:Jimmy Nelson (footballer)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Sportsfan77777 (talk · contribs) 00:24, 22 November 2020 (UTC)

I'll review this Welsh Scottish article. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 00:24, 22 November 2020 (UTC)

Lead

• before becoming the first team from outside England to win the competition in 1927 <<<=== Cardiff became, not Nelson

Early years

• to complete the transfer ===>>> to complete a transfer to Cardiff

Cardiff

• remained prominent ===>>> he remained prominent
• With the match tied at 2–2, Nelson became involved in an altercation with an opposition player in his penalty area and was subsequently dismissed after the referee witnessed him kick opposition forward Tommy Johnson, with Manchester City converting the resulting penalty to win the game. <<<=== Split into two sentences.
• be helped the side ===>>> he helped the side
• Add that they placed 14th during the 1927 FA Cup Final year.
• over local rivals Swansea City ===>>> over Swansea City, their local rivals, (to avoid a WP:SEAOFBLUE)

Newcastle

• eight matches ===>>> eight cup matches
• and conceded 14 goals ===>>> as they conceded 14 goals

Southend

• Okay.

International

• Okay.

Personal life

• Okay.

Overall

• Anything on playing style? (left-back, centre-back, or right-back?) It's fine if it's not available. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 00:44, 22 November 2020 (UTC)

  There's nothing particularly descriptive I could find unfortunately. The best quotes I've already included in the main text. Kosack (talk) 13:02, 23 November 2020 (UTC)

Looks good! Not much to do, placing on hold. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 00:44, 22 November 2020 (UTC)

• @Sportsfan77777: Thanks for the review, I've addressed all of the issues above. Let me know what you think. Kosack (talk) 13:02, 23 November 2020 (UTC)

Passing, good work! Looking forward to seeing the good topic finished. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 17:59, 23 November 2020 (UTC)