Talk:Joel Eriksson Ek/GA1
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Reviewer: GhostRiver (talk · contribs) 14:32, 26 January 2024 (UTC)
Hello! My name is GhostRiver, and I'll be conducting this GA review. I will assess the article against the good article criteria. Once I complete my review, you will have seven days to implement the suggested edits.
- GhostRiver, I believe I have addressed all of your concerns to date. HickoryOughtShirt?4 (talk) 16:11, 11 February 2024 (UTC)
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Infobox and lede[edit]
- Would bulk this up a bit with a couple key moments or stats from after he was drafted
Personal life[edit]
- Can cut the word "parents" in the first sentence, the "to" already implies parentage
Done
hockey playing family as his
→hockey playing family: his
Done
was drafted by
→was selected by
orwas taken by
to limit repetition of "draft"Done
because of his dedication to the sport and his playing skills
→due to his playing skills as well as his dedication to the sport
Done
Playing career[edit]
Sweden[edit]
- "for
theFärjestad BK" wherever it appearsDone
- Link 2014–15 to 2014–15 SHL season
Done
- Link first instance of Goal (ice hockey) and Point (ice hockey)
Done
- Remove hyphen in "three-years"
Done
season and eventually raised his draft ranking from 22nd to fourth among all international skaters
→season, entering the draft as the fourth-highest rated international skater
Done
It was suggested by numerous hockey analysts
→Several hockey analysts theorized
Done
Minnesota Wild[edit]
- Comma after
ahead of the 2016–17 season
Done
- Specify which game made him the first Wild teenager to have a three-assist game
Done
- The source only says the game was against the Bruins so I added this reference from NHL.com as well to show it was on October 26 and he got three points
- "General manager" isn't capitalized
Done
in order to not burn the first year of his contract
split infinitive + informal language. Suggest combining this with sentence before it to make something likeAfter two games as a healthy scratch, Eriksson Ek was returned to Färjestad BK on 17 November, thus preserving all three years on his rookie contract.
Done
- Comma after
He made his debut in Game 1 of the series
Done
- Don't need the line about 2017 Worlds here, that'll be covered in the int'l play section
Done
- Add kg conversion for
10 pounds of muscle
Done
- Can cut second sentence of second paragraph and just say that USA Today named him a rookie to watch.
Done
scored the teams'
→scored the team's
Done
continued to struggle to score goals and assists
→continued his scoring struggles
Done
- Cut last sentence of second paragraph, Chuck's firing doesn't affect JEE
Done
- "their momentum
wasstagnated"Done
- This isn't necessary to put in the article, but the Greenway - Eriksson Ek - Kunin line was called the GEEK Squad
- The double E just gives you so much to work with! HickoryOughtShirt?4 (talk) 22:34, 16 February 2024 (UTC)
- Cut the line about Fenton being replaced by Guerin for the same reason as above (not directly relevant)
Done
- Comma after
lost veteran centerman Mikko Koivu and Eric Staal
Done
- Cut line about the 2020-21 season format
Done
Although he injured his knee in Game 6, Eriksson Ek returned to finish the game but remained injured.
Confusing wordingDone
- "Eriksson Ek remained the Wild's top-line center going into the 2021-22 season but swapped"
Done
second-fastest goals to start a game
How fast were they?Done
- Added to article. Gotta love oddly specific stats. HickoryOughtShirt?4 (talk) 22:34, 16 February 2024 (UTC)
International play[edit]
- Move medal table to this section per MOS
Done
- "his home country of Sweden"
Done
He first represented Sweden at
→He first played with the Sweden under-18 team
both for flow and to make the WL make more senseDone
- "although the team failed to medal both times."
Done
- Would be helpful to have his goal and point tallies from all tournaments, not just 2017 Worlds
Done
Player profile[edit]
Described as an aggressive offensive threat
By whom?Done
- "Eriksson Ek
says hemodels his game after"Done
- "assistant general manager" doesn't need to be capitalized
Done
his ability to be a two-way player
→his skill as a two-way player
Done
- Swap the general description from Stubb for the direct quote of "great speed, a good strong shot and excellent puck-handling"
Done
Career statistics[edit]
- Make sure this section is sourced
- At the very bottom of the article, it says
Biographical information and career statistics from
and then lists a bunch of sources. Is this alright? It is pretty standard on other articles. HickoryOughtShirt?4 (talk) 18:41, 19 February 2024 (UTC)
- At the very bottom of the article, it says
References[edit]
- "url-access=subscription" should be noted in any reference from The Athletic
Done
- Presumably articles put out by the Swedish Hockey League are written in Swedish, not in Finnish?
Done
- The following publications should be italicized (i.e. marked as "work" and not "publisher"): The Athletic, Star Tribune, USA Today, Sports Illustrated, Twin Cities Pioneer Press, The Hockey News
Done
- [64] uses NHL.com as the work instead of National Hockey League as the publisher
Done
- Typo in [69], an additional "M" at the end of "Twin Cities Pioneer Press"
Done
- Per MOS:ALLCAPS, references in all caps should be reduced to title case
Done
Other comments[edit]
- No stability concerns, nominator is primary editor
- One photo is properly licensed. Would recommend cropping so that just Joel is in the photo
Done
- Earwig copyvio score looks good, a pass reveals it's all proper nouns and direct quotes
HickoryOughtShirt?4 Apologies for the delay, I have been dealing with personal and medical issues. Earwig is down as of my writing this, so I'll let you address the prose comments before I do a CV sweep. Putting on hold. — GhostRiver 20:05, 16 February 2024 (UTC)
- No worries GhostRiver, health always comes first. Fun fact: I looked at other GA hockey articles for inspiration on the lead and began copying JVR's article when I realized it seemed familiar...two years fly by! HickoryOughtShirt?4 (talk) 18:49, 19 February 2024 (UTC)