Talk:John D'Orazio/GA1

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Reviewer: Mike Christie (talk · contribs) 16:42, 21 August 2022 (UTC)[reply]

I'll review this. Mike Christie (talk - contribs - library) 16:42, 21 August 2022 (UTC)[reply]

The image is appropriately tagged and has a suitable FUR.

"Crikey" is mis-spelled "Crickey" twice in the sources.
Footnote 73 is "Taylor, Robert; Banks, Amanda (16 April 2008). "D'Orazio back in Labor ranks". p. 4." -- it's not clear what this refers to.
"in 2003 he had organised a meeting between a City of Bayswater employee at the centre of a Crime and Corruption Commission (CCC) investigation and the owner of a carpet business": organizing a meeting isn't wrong in itself, so I think we need to say in the lead something about the alleged deal reached between the two, otherwise the reader is left wondering why it's mentioned.

The lead is a bit long for an article of this length, but I wouldn't hold up GA for that. Mike Christie (talk - contribs - library) 17:41, 21 August 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks. I've fixed all the issues you've pointed out. I've shortened the lead a little bit, but that was hard when at the same time I was lengthening it for the third point you make. Steelkamp (talk) 03:27, 22 August 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Fixes look good; passing. Mike Christie (talk - contribs - library) 16:38, 22 August 2022 (UTC)[reply]