Talk:Jozo Tomasevich/GA1

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Reviewer: Pickersgill-Cunliffe (talk · contribs) 21:09, 26 December 2023 (UTC)[reply]

I'll take a look at this. Pickersgill-Cunliffe (talk) 21:09, 26 December 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Prelim

Article is stable
Images correctly licensed
No duplicated links
Earwig reports copyvio unlikely

Lede and infobox

This is a very large lede, being close in size to the two sections of main text; it's not a requirement for this, but I'd probably look into shortening it

I'm reluctant to do that, so will see what others think at ACR. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 09:58, 3 January 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Link quisling

Done. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 09:58, 3 January 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Main text does not provide the place of death in infobox

Yep, have deleted for now, I imagine I will find one before I nominate it for ACR. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 10:59, 3 January 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Main text does not say that he was given American citizenship

I have a source for this (a Yugoslav war crimes trial transcript), but it will have to wait a week until I have access to my desktop. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 10:53, 3 January 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Early life, education, career and family

Slightly confusing that the main text begins by using Tomašević and then goes the rest of the article only using Tomasevich, despite him only changing name style in the, I assume, late 1930s

Good point, used the Slavic spelling until then. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 10:11, 3 January 2024 (UTC)[reply]

State where the "availing himself of the rich resources of Harvard University" quote comes from

cited more closely to make this clear. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 10:47, 3 January 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Would be interesting to know what exactly his role was during the war with the Board of Economic Warfare and the United Nations Relief and Rehabilitation Administration

I haven't seen a source that goes into this in any detail. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 09:58, 3 January 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Scholarship

Citation #1 is repeated unnecessarily in paragraph 2

The first one is there because it follows a quote. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 10:13, 3 January 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Why in reviewing a book on economics is it necessary to say that Lamer later worked in food and agriculture?

It is establishing Lamer's bonafides to have a valued opinion on the matter, especially given he does not have an article. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 10:25, 3 January 2024 (UTC)[reply]

In paragraph 3 108 words are your prose, while 121 are various quotes; it reads well enough but I think you could look to paraphrase a little more often!

A fair observation, but in the case of reviews, I think the reviewers' words often do the job best, and there can also be no argument about what they meant. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 10:44, 3 January 2024 (UTC)[reply]

"This led into work"

Done. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 10:13, 3 January 2024 (UTC)[reply]

"basically a study in politics, ideology and military operations, although the role of the economic factor has not been overlooked" according to who?

Vucinich, added. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 10:25, 3 January 2024 (UTC)[reply]

"reviewed the book positively"

Done. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 10:42, 3 January 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Link quisling

Done. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 10:42, 3 January 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Not sure we need "so-called" Independent State of Croatia

It is often referred to in that way because it was hardly independent, it was basically a quasi-protectorate of the Axis. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 10:13, 3 January 2024 (UTC)[reply]

"and remains unpublished." best to give a date for this...you never know!

Done. If it was published, it would make my year! Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 10:48, 3 January 2024 (UTC)[reply]

"According to Alexander Vucinich" no need to repeat full name again

Done. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 10:13, 3 January 2024 (UTC)[reply]

References

References generally look good. Vucinich, Baletic, Stanford University, Lamer, Irwin, Sanders, Auty, Goldstein, Dragnich, Campbell, Kadezabek, and Schmider, all seem to be sources will page numbers excluded, While I realise these are mostly short articles, I don't see a valid reason why we should just ignore including specific page numbers despite this?

They are just the shortened footnotes, and the refs are easily verifiable within very limited page ranges. In these cases, where they are single or several page reviews in easily available scholarly journals, I really don't see the need. I think I'll see how the source review goes at ACR before adding them. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 10:52, 3 January 2024 (UTC)[reply]

@Peacemaker67: Hi, that's all I have for now. Will await your responses. Pickersgill-Cunliffe (talk) 21:09, 26 December 2023 (UTC)[reply]

@Peacemaker67: With the understanding that the citizenship issue will be fixed as soon as possible I am passing this article as satisfying the GA criteria. Apologies for the delay in getting back to this, your replies slipped past me while I've been distracted preparing for some annual leave! Pickersgill-Cunliffe (talk) 00:20, 8 January 2024 (UTC)[reply]