Talk:Junior Salesman/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Ed! (talk · contribs) 21:44, 26 February 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Add another line or two to the lead noting what exactly in the episode reviewers liked and disliked.
Plot section should be broken up into a few paragraphs.
"and while Dwight dismisses Clark again after the kid aces his interview," -- Unencyclopedic language. Could this be reworded?
Redundancy here: "he is too committed to making a good hire to actually give the job to someone like Mose or Rolf or Trevor. " then "But Dwight is stuck between not being able to honestly hire any of his friends and being afraid they will hate him if he doesn't just pick one of them."
The ending part of the plot definitely needs to be included, with Brian and Pam, as it is clearly foreshadowing some future event, and its extensive mention in the reviews means it would make it confusing to the reader not to be explained.
Production section should note all of the guest actors, which should also be cited. Only a few are currently cited.
I fixed two duplicate links. Disambiguation links all look good. External links all look good.
I don't see any problems with article stability or neutrality.

Placing the article on hold pending a few improvements. —Ed!^(talk) 22:05, 26 February 2013 (UTC)[reply]