Talk:Kato Svanidze/GA1
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Reviewer: Sainsf (talk · contribs) 15:18, 27 March 2016 (UTC)
Hi! Will review this. Sainsf <^>Feel at home 15:18, 27 March 2016 (UTC)
@Wikimandia: Added all my comments: Sainsf <^>Feel at home 07:17, 1 April 2016 (UTC)
Lead
[edit]- As per WP:MOSLEAD too many pronunciations should not be kept in the lead. Keep just one, others can go to the infobox.
- Can the lead be expanded so that it covers all parts of the article?
Early life
[edit]- Don't make too many paras, it appears choppy. Please combine parts.
- "Rachelian." "Rachelian".
Early life in Tiflis
[edit]- Source for the first and second paras?
- This section is also bitty.
Marriage to Stalin
[edit]- Appears choppy.
- Stalin (known as "Soso" to his Georgian friends) and Kato were very much in love. Why is this included here? Seems unnecessary.
- Stalin later told his youngest child, daughter Svetlana Alliluyeva Would be good to mention that she came from his second marriage.
- A few months later authorities made the connection; an Okhrana raid on a Bolshevik residence in Moscow revealed a paper with their address on Freylinskaya Street and the message, "seamstress Svanidze, ask for Soso." Source?
Illness and death
[edit]- and wrote her and Stalin Should it not be "wrote to"?
Family
[edit]- Duplink: Svetlana Alliluyeva
- You should clearly state that Maria Anisimovna Korona is Mariko.
- Soviet law required the divorce decree to printed in the newspaper along with their home addresses "to be printed". By the way, I don't see why this part needs to be included.
- Source for the 3rd para?
This should be all. These addressed, I would be happy to promote this. Sainsf <^>Feel at home 07:17, 1 April 2016 (UTC)
@Wikimandia: You there? Sainsf <^>Feel at home 13:45, 5 April 2016 (UTC)
- Hi @Sainsf: thanks for your time on this. I will work on improvements! Thank you so much! —МандичкаYO 😜 22:25, 5 April 2016 (UTC)
- @Wikimandia: You there? If there is no response by 12th this month (a week since the last response) I will have to fail this nomination. Sainsf <^>Feel at home 13:27, 10 April 2016 (UTC)
- Hi @Sainsf: Yes, I'm so sorry, I have not had a chance to get to this. I will do it tonight! Thank you for the reminder and your help with my first GA!!! —МандичкаYO 😜 14:51, 10 April 2016 (UTC)
- @Wikimandia: Thanks. You have done really well in your first GA, I could notice only a handful of issues! Sainsf <^>Feel at home 14:56, 10 April 2016 (UTC)
- Wikimandia and Sainsf, with no edits to this page in 9 days, and none to the article since before the review began, where does this stand? Display name 99 (talk) 22:00, 19 April 2016 (UTC)
- @Wikimandia:, @Display name 99: I have been busy elsewhere. I am afraid this review can not wait anymore. I must fail this after all the delay. I would like to set it renominated after the above issues have been fixed. I would request the nominator to be faster in their response, the review can not remain open for long without any activity. Sainsf <^>Feel at home 04:18, 20 April 2016 (UTC)
- Wikimandia and Sainsf, with no edits to this page in 9 days, and none to the article since before the review began, where does this stand? Display name 99 (talk) 22:00, 19 April 2016 (UTC)
- @Wikimandia: Thanks. You have done really well in your first GA, I could notice only a handful of issues! Sainsf <^>Feel at home 14:56, 10 April 2016 (UTC)