Talk:Keshavrao Sonawane/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Wizardman (talk · contribs) 15:51, 21 January 2017 (UTC)[reply]

I'll give this a review. Wizardman 15:51, 21 January 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Here's what I found:

"He was elected as MLA for 4 times" elected to the MLA. Also put MLA in parentheses after Maharashtra Legislative Assembly.
You need spaces after punctuation.
I don't know if the cite needed tag in the infobox is required but it certainly needs to be addressed.
"Keshavrao Sonawane was political mentor of Prominent Political Leaders like Vilasrao Deshmukh,Shivraj Patil." This isn't noted elsewhere in the article, violating WP:LEAD, also needs further clarification if you're going to include it at all.
"Keshavrao Sonavane was one who helped Shivaraj Patil to get his first break to stand from Latur Constituency" huh? Also the source is just to a google book link, you have to at least include the page(s).
The Lead shouldn't need references ad the information should be elsewhere in the article.
"Keshavrao Sonawane, a lawyer from small town called Latur got" rm a small town, superfluous.
Spell out LLB at first mention (Bachelor of Laws) so people know what you're talking about.
" Keshavrao because of his legislative experience and his farmer’s family roots." You mean farmer's family roots? Also, nothing about his family is mentioned int he early life section; is nothing out there?
Come to think of it, there's nothing on his personal life in the article at all.
"in the latur region." Latur
"And as an aftermath of this he lost the assembly " no starting sentences with and.

The rest was just on a skim just to note the most significant issues:

"Before passing this law , every market committee was having its own rules, this law made all market committees in Maharashtra to have single central administrative law under state control. " I think i get what's its saying but it needs to be completely reworded.
'Earlier Latur was small town in the Osmanabad District." huh? this seems completely out of place.
"in the May month of year 1961" Just say in May 1961, that's silly.
" Currently terna has 3500 TCD capacity.factory covers area of 3 talukas i.e. Osmanabad,Kallamb and Latur.this factory covers nearly 171 villages by area of operation" This is basically unreadable as is.
"Uchalya novel is an autobiographical account of the life of a stereotyped underdog but of a representative of a section of society thriving on petty crimes." And now we have unsourced POV too.

This article, if I'm being honest, is bad. It basically needs a rewrite from scratch, and then a copyedit after that. I shouldn't be finding issues with every single sentence. The sources appear to be decent, but even that needs fine tuning. Nothing redeemable here as this article easily fails GA status. Wizardman 16:08, 21 January 2017 (UTC)[reply]