Talk:Khalili Collection of Enamels of the World/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Tim riley (talk · contribs) 08:25, 26 June 2021 (UTC)

There's not much wrong with this article. I wonder why it has been waiting so long for a review. My main quibble is WP:OVERLINK, as regards duplicate links and links to major place-names. The former are Geneva, Cupid, hookah, Mahmud II, plique-à-jour, Namikawa Sōsuke, Kawade Shibatarō, and the Khalili Collection of Japanese Art; the latter are Paris, Vienna, Egypt and Syria.

Only three minor points on the prose. I really don't buy "An ewer". One doesn't write (or say) "an ewe" and the same goes for "ewer". "President of France Émile Loubet" is a bit clumsy, like saying "Queen of Britain Victoria": "President Émile Loubet of France" would flow more naturally. And in "likely written as calligraphy then converted to enamel", "likely" strikes an unexpectedly American note where BrE usage is "probably", and "then" is not a conjunction and could do with an "and" in front of it.

I don't propose to put the review on hold over such trivial points, and we can cut to the chase (but please make sure to attend to the WP:OVERLINKs, at least: the three stylistic points you are of course free to act on or ignore, as you prefer).

Overall summary

GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria

1. Is it reasonably well written?

   A. Prose quality:

   B. MoS compliance for lead, layout, words to watch, fiction, and lists:

2. Is it factually accurate and verifiable?

   A. References to sources:

   Well referenced.

   B. Citation of reliable sources where necessary:

   Well referenced.

   C. No original research:

3. Is it broad in its coverage?

   A. Major aspects:

   B. Focused:

4. Is it neutral?

   Fair representation without bias:

5. Is it stable?

   No edit wars, etc:

6. Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?

   A. Images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have fair use rationales:

   Well illustrated.

   B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:

   Well illustrated.

7. Overall:

   Pass or Fail: