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GA Review

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Reviewer: Crisco 1492 (talk · contribs) 14:30, 4 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Checklist

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Rate Attribute Review Comment
1. Well-written:
1a. the prose is clear, concise, and understandable to an appropriately broad audience; spelling and grammar are correct.
1b. it complies with the Manual of Style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation.
2. Verifiable with no original research:
2a. it contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline. Fine
2b. reliable sources are cited inline. All content that could reasonably be challenged, except for plot summaries and that which summarizes cited content elsewhere in the article, must be cited no later than the end of the paragraph (or line if the content is not in prose).
2c. it contains no original research. Fine
3. Broad in its coverage:
3a. it addresses the main aspects of the topic. Fine
3b. it stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style). Fine
4. Neutral: it represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each. Yep
5. Stable: it does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute. Within definition
6. Illustrated, if possible, by media such as images, video, or audio:
6a. media are tagged with their copyright statuses, and valid non-free use rationales are provided for non-free content. Fine
6b. media are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions. Fine
7. Overall assessment. Pending

Comments

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  • What do you think of the following?
  1. Spin magazine (not very quotable, I know)
  1. You know, I looked at that earlier but I had thought I'd already used it. GRAPPLE X 00:04, 5 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  1. AllMusic (Ezra Pound? Really?)
  1. Aye, there's a bibliography in the liner notes that mentions Pound and Eliot without specifying what was used or how (though I am a reader it's not really my field of expertise). I've added a few sentences from this source. GRAPPLE X 00:04, 5 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  1. Looks a bit better. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 00:09, 5 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  1. Berio's site
  2. Berio again
  3. and again
  1. Ah, never thought to look for a dead man's website (naive, I know). Good catch. GRAPPLE X 00:04, 5 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  1. Choir's website
  1. I think what that's saying is that the choir had previously performed the piece elsewhere and re-used elements of the previous performance visually during the live show that this was recorded from; am I right and is that worth adding? GRAPPLE X 00:04, 5 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  1. Looks like it, yes. A couple interesting statements about the themes too (an indictment of usury, for example) — Crisco 1492 (talk) 00:07, 5 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  1. Combing through it again now to pull that out; I'll see how to source both the site and its translation at once as well. GRAPPLE X 00:20, 5 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  1. Any luck? — Crisco 1492 (talk) 10:58, 5 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  1. This look alright? GRAPPLE X 19:06, 5 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]
And a whole bunch of minor review sites which may or may not be worth citing.
  • Thanks for such a quick review (figured I should shake the dust off with something I had already worked up a bit before I got back into the swing of things). Hope I've addressed some of what you're after, though if you could point out any non-quote uses of AmE that I've missed I'll come at them with dog poo and knives. GRAPPLE X 00:04, 5 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Spotchecks

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  • a: Not in source given. Source says the themes are Dantesque, but not that they are the main theme's in Dante's works (i.e. source says Dante had such themes, not that they were the most common)
    Reworded, how's it look now? GRAPPLE X 02:10, 8 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • b: Fine, matches. No close paraphrasing.
  • c: Fine, matches. No close paraphrasing.
  • 2
  • a: Fine, matches. No close paraphrasing.
  • b: Fine, matches. No close paraphrasing.
  • c: Doesn't have the label here.
  • d: Fine, matches. No close paraphrasing.
  • e: Fine, matches. No close paraphrasing.
  • 5
  • a: Fine, matches. No close paraphrasing.
  • b: Fine, matches. No close paraphrasing.
  • 9
  • a: Fine, matches. No close paraphrasing.
  • b: Fine, matches. No close paraphrasing.
  • c: Fine, matches. No close paraphrasing.
  • 13
  • a: Fine, matches. No close paraphrasing.
  • b: Fine, matches. No close paraphrasing.
  • c: Fine, matches. No close paraphrasing.
  • Just realised, you don't have the language of the album stated explicitly. You can cite it to the AV-club, which also has a little bit of information about the individual tracks and the actual sound of the album; Sputnikmusic has more too.
In short: couple of close paraphrasing issues, article would benefit from information about the album's sound — Crisco 1492 (talk) 14:40, 7 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]
Maybe I'm misreading something; where are the issues with paraphrasing? I'm also not sure what you mean by sound——the musical genre (free jazz, etc) or the sort of waffle-y descriptions (it's like Monteverdi, some passages "stand alone", etc)? I could work either in more. Have added the language and a nota bene on the track titles (though I'm not keen on its placement, but nothing else seemed to work within that template). Will gladly add more about the sound when I'm sure which aspect you mean. GRAPPLE X 02:10, 8 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • It's not the paraphrasing that's the issue, but some of the facts aren't in the sources you've linked. As for the sound, I note that there are descriptions of the songs / text and whatnot. Patton mixes Italian with a little English, there are shrill sopranos, stuff like that: what we'd expect to hear if we listen to the album. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 02:47, 8 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]