Talk:LeRoy Prinz/GA1
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Reviewer: Taylor Trescott (talk · contribs) 02:51, 3 July 2014 (UTC)
I'll do this one. Time to cut the "media and drama" backlog. Taylor Trescott - my talk + my edits 02:51, 3 July 2014 (UTC)
- The lead should only be 2 paragraphs per WP:LEAD.
- It also should be rejigged. Prinz had 3 Oscar nominations; this should be one of the first things mentioned and yet it's not there.
- Lead should use his middle name
- "Leroy Jerome Prinz" not LeRoy?
- ""introducing the American strut step" only needs one "
- "during World War I" you said this earlier in the paragraph
- Why does the Career section not mention his three Oscar nominations?
- His Golden Globe win is also not mentioned
- Two paragraphs in "Career" are not sourced
- Any info on his personal life? IMDB says he had a kid named LeRoy Jr.
Overall I think this is close to meeting the GA criteria and will place it on hold. Taylor Trescott - my talk + my edits 21:27, 3 July 2014 (UTC)
Done Thanks very much for reviewing this. Coretheapple (talk) 13:39, 8 July 2014 (UTC)