Talk:Like I'm Gonna Lose You/GA4

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GA Review

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Reviewer: Aoba47 (talk · contribs) 21:58, 9 November 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Grabbing this for a review if that is okay with you. This is probably my favorite song by Trainor. Aoba47 (talk) 21:58, 9 November 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Lead and infobox

References are typically discouraged for the lead section unless you are citing controversial information. I do not believe that this is the case though, as this information should already be located in the article with the citations.

Moved to body

I would make the part about its release as a single the second sentence of the first paragraph as I have generally seen this done in other GAs/FAs on songs.

Done

For this phrase (Contemporary hit radio), I do not believe that “contemporary” needs to be capitalized.

Done

I have two issues with this sentence (Trainor wrote it after she had a dream about a loved one dying, with the intent that its lyrics will take the listener to a real place). The first being, it could be read that the loved was dying with the intent described in the dependent phrase. I am also not sure what you mean by “take the listener to a real place”. It sounds rather generic, as I am assuming that all songwriters want the listener to feel some sort of real emotion.

Addressed

You say that the song was praised in the opening sentence of the second paragraph, though there are more mixed/negative reviews in the body of the article. Those should be addressed here as well.

Added second sentence about mixed review

I am uncertain about this phrasing (noted that it gave her vocals the main stage) as veers slightly too much into figurative/review territory for me. I think that saying (noted its focus on her vocals) would be a more concise way to say this. You are also just taking words directly from a review for this, which is not recommended.

Fixed

Why is the following sentence (It was described as having an earnest, tender, and subdued sound.) needed for the lead? It is good for the body of the article, but I am uncertain if it is necessary for the lead.

Removed

For this sentence ( "Like I'm Gonna Lose You" was a commercial success, topping the Australian singles chart for four consecutive weeks, and the New Zealand singles chart for three weeks.), I would remove “was a commercial success” and just say “topped…” and let the chart positions speak for themselves.

Addressed

For this part (Constellation Jones directed the music video for it), you can remove “for it” as it is clear from the context.

Done!

For this sentence (Trainor has performed "Like I'm Gonna Lose You" live on several shows, including the 2015 Billboard Music Awards, The Tonight Show Starring Jimmy Fallon, The Today Show, The Ellen DeGeneres Show and the American Music Awards of 2015.), do you need to list all of the shows in the lead?

Trimmed it down to just 3

In the infobox, you use “Epic” and in the lead, you use “Epic Records”. Be consistent either way.

I disagree with this. The ideal for music articles is to have the word "Records" in the body but not in the infobox. See Diamonds (Rihanna song) and Single Ladies (Put a Ring on It).--N Ø 05:19, 11 November 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Writing and production

Link Meghan Trainor on her first mention in the body of the article. Link anyone that is first introduced in the body of the article (i.e. Caitlyn Smith, etc.)

Done

In this sentence (Trainor and Gelbuda performed all of the track's instrumentation, production, and programming.), the verb “performed” does not make sense in this context. Saying that someone performed production or performed programming sounds odd. You could just substitute it with “did”.

Done

Why is this sentence (Trainor announced her collaboration with Legend in an interview with MTV News at the iHeartRadio Music Festival in September 2014) necessary? Why is it helpful for a reader to know when she announces a collaboration publicly?

Done

I would revise this sentence (His vocal was recorded as a duet with Trainor's by Jason Agel at Germano Studios in New York City, with the assistance of Kenta Yonesaka.) to (Jasen Agel recorded Legend’s vocals at Germano Studios in New York City, with the assistance of Kenta Yonesaka) as the current phrasing is awkward. I would also be careful with the amount of passive tense used in the paragraph.

Fixed.--N Ø 05:19, 11 November 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Composition and lyrical interpretation

I think for this sentence (Critics noted the song as a more earnest, tender, and subdued sound compared Trainor's other material.), you mean “has” instead of “as”.

I think both of the words work with this specific sentence but changed it to "has"

The last sentence of the first paragraph needs a citation.

Fixed

I have the same question about this part (Describing the song, Trainor said that its lyrics that "take [the listener] to a real place”.). I am not sure what is meant here, and it is a rather generic sentiment, particularly for a ballad.

Tbh I didn't see any harm with keeping that but removed anyway

I would avoid the passive tense for this sentence (It was created after Trainor had a dream about losing a loved one.)

Fixed.--N Ø 05:19, 11 November 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Critical reception

For this part (Rolling Stone writer Chuck Arnold praised the song, calling it "finger-snapping balladry" and likened it to a duet between Marvin Gaye and Tammi Terrell.), you would need to say the name of the duet rather than just link it that way. It currently goes against Wikipedia:EASTEREGG.

The source actually never said the name of the song. Unlinked!

The paragraphs may benefit from topic sentences to give them more structure. I would also revise this section to try to make it more a narrative as there appears to be a lot of quotes used without a clear direction. For instead, I noticed a trend in the first paragraph was the praise for voice and the second paragraph for the praise for Legend and the criticism for Trainor. I think this section could be a lot better with a clearer structure. Here (Wikipedia:Copyediting reception sections) is a helpful resource for this.

Thanks for linking that! I tried to rewrite it.--N Ø 05:19, 11 November 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Chart performance

Everything seems good here.

Great!--N Ø 05:19, 11 November 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Music video

For this sentence (Some aspects of the video were likened to the music video for Kanye West's "Only One".), who doing this comparison? Also, do they specify more about this (i.e. how the videos are similar)?

Rephrased

The link for Fuse (TV channel) should be fixed.

Fixed.--N Ø 05:19, 11 November 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Live performances

For this sentence (The song was part of the setlist for Trainor's The Untouchable Tour (2016), and Trainor was joined by James Corden during one of the performances for it.), I would change the last part to something like this (where Trainer was joined by James Corden during a performance.).

Done.--N Ø 05:19, 11 November 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Final comments

I hope this review was helpful. Once my comments are addressed, I will pass this. Have a great rest of your weekend. Aoba47 (talk) 01:24, 11 November 2018 (UTC)[reply]

I found the review really helpful, and effected most of the suggestions. Please feel free to add any number of comments before you feel the article is improved to your satisfaction!--N Ø 05:19, 11 November 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you for addressing everything. I will ✓ Pass this. Aoba47 (talk) 21:18, 11 November 2018 (UTC)[reply]

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