Talk:Lufsig/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 15:10, 17 February 2020 (UTC)

Will review MWright96 (talk) 15:10, 17 February 2020 (UTC)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:

Lead

• "Following the incident (and the discovery that its transliterated Chinese name sounds similar to a profanity when pronounced in Cantonese)" - the parentheses are not really necessary
• " a protester at Chief Executive CY Leung (who had been nicknamed "the wolf" by his critics)" - better and avoids the use of parentheses; CY Leung, the Chief Executive, whom his critics nicknamed "the wolf".
• "selling out at IKEA stores in Hong Kong, as well as in 11 out of 14 stores in mainland China." - repetition of "stores"; try to use the appropriate alternative word other than stores

Development

• The wikilink for Silke Leffler in the lead can also be applied of his first mention in this sub-section
• "Lufsig was designed by German designer Silke Leffler, drawing inspiration from the fairy tale Little Red Riding Hood." - The Ikea source should be moved to when the comma is used and the Ikea toy wolf becomes Hong Kong protest symbol from BBC News source be put in its place because the IKEA source does not mention that it was inspired by Little Red Riding Hood
• "where a portion of the profit from IKEA's" - the company's
• "and accompanying storybooks sold during the holiday season would be donated by IKEA" - same issue as above. You can use a different word to describe IKEA in this instance
• "The name of the toy is an adjective form of the Swedish verb "lufsa"," - Time does not explicitly state this, but this source does

Symbolism in Hong Kong

• "sparked a pro-democracy movement " - brought about a
• "Critics of Leung have nicknamed him" - can also be Leung's critics for reasons of conciseness
• alluding to his alleged cunningness," - perceived is a more neutral word to use instead
• Wikilink pun on the first instance not the second instance of its mention
• "The popularity soon extended to mainland China (where 11 of the 14 IKEA stores sold out)," - the parentheses are unneeded and can be replaced by commas
• "and even to Canada" - drop the word "even"
• "A Lufsig Facebook page amassed over 45,000 likes," - this source from CNN states it is 50,000 likes and it would be preferable to use since it is more up to date
• "Leung himself posted a picture of himself with a Lufsig he bought for his daughter," - how about mention that it was a Christmas present?

References

• References 3, 8, 9 are lacking the dates the respective sources were published
• References 5, 6, 13 and 14 should include the dates the references were accessed
• Reference 6 is dead and will require an archive link
• References 8, 11, 12, 16 will benefit from the inclusion of the source's respective authors
• Reference 15 is missing the work parameter of the source and will need to be archived because it is dead

Overall the main issues concern the fact that there some issues with the prose and there are portions of the article not explicitly verified by the sources that can easily be rectified. There are some sources that are dead but can be archived and some lack the basic parameters such as the name of the author(s), name of the work, publication date and access date. On hold. MWright96 (talk) 16:21, 17 February 2020 (UTC)

Will work on it over the next few days. feminist (talk) 16:42, 17 February 2020 (UTC)

@MWright96: Thank you for taking the time to work on the review. I have addressed the issues you've raised here. Please take a look to see if you have any other concerns. feminist (talk) 17:22, 24 February 2020 (UTC)

@Feminist: Now promoting to GA class. Note I've made two changes to the article. MWright96 (talk) 20:38, 25 February 2020 (UTC)