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Reviewer: Ruby2010 (talk) 18:40, 20 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]

I will review this article today. Ruby2010 (talk) 18:40, 20 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]


GA review (see here for criteria)
  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
Her copy of Edward Hall's Chronicles she annotated in French
 Done
According to Lady Jane Grey it was Mary Sidney who, on 9 July 1553, called upon her to bring her to Syon House, the place where she was informed that she was Queen of England according to King Edward's will.
  • The phrasing of this sentence is a little confusing if someone wasn't familiar with Jane Grey's history. Maybe slightly reword to make it clearer Grey and not Dudley is being referred to? Ruby2010 (talk) 19:43, 20 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]
  • Explained that Lady Jane was her sister-in-law and related to Edward VI.
In 1556 Mary Sidney went with her husband to Ireland, where her first daughter, Mary Margaret, was born. Queen Mary acted as godmother, but the child died at "one year and three quarters old".[11] Meanwhile, the infant Philip stayed behind at Penshurst[12] until his mother returned from Ireland in September 1558.[1] In January of the same year she had been restored in blood by Parliament, when the Dudleys' attainder had been lifted.[13]
  • I rephrased a bit, but I think her "restoration" by parliament makes a good close to the whole section, in a sense pointing to her new life under Elizabeth. It only happened a few months before she returned from Ireland.
On Elizabeth I's accession in November 1558 Mary Sidney became an extraordinary Gentlewoman of the Privy Chamber, an unsalaried position.[14]
  • It refers to the office, but I changed it.
Via Lady Sidney Elizabeth discreetly indicated her earnest interest in marrying the Archduke—when she cooled down again within days, Mary Sidney felt betrayed and was angry at her brother and the Queen.[16] The Spanish ambassador, in his turn, was piqued that she used an Italian interpreter when she needed none.[17]
 Done Expanded.
On the passage, Lady Sidney lost her jewels and fine clothes in a shipwreck.[1]
 Done Unfortunately there is not much on this, but I understand another vessel is meant.
A year later her health was in such a state that Henry Sidney believed he would soon have the chance to take a second wife.[1]
 Done
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
 Done
  2. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects): b (focused):
  3. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:
  4. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:
  5. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
  6. Overall:
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Overall a good article, albeit short. Will put on hold for seven days for replies and/or edits to my suggestions. Thanks, Ruby2010 (talk) 19:43, 20 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]
I expanded/added a few points. Thanks for reviewing! Buchraeumer (talk) 15:59, 22 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]
Pass for GA status. Well done with the article! Ruby2010 (talk) 17:48, 22 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]
Thank you very much! Buchraeumer (talk) 21:26, 22 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]
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