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Reviewer: Sammi Brie (talk · contribs) 06:29, 11 January 2023 (UTC)
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Just some tweaks, mostly to the choppy prose style. 7-day hold to An anonymous username, not my real name. Ping me when changes have been made. Sammi Brie (she/her • t • c) 06:29, 11 January 2023 (UTC)
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[edit]- Your style has a lot of short paragraphs and choppy sentences. Some increased variety of sentences and length of paragraphs would go a long way to improving your prose.
- Agreed; my editing style has improved much since then. I've cut down on excessive paragraphs.
- His father worked in insurance and his mother was a school secretary. Comma after "insurance": see User:Sammi Brie/Commas in sentences
Done
- Spell out "eight" instead of 8
Done
- three episodes the missing "of"
- The Career section reads like a proseline. The paragraphs are short.
- Italicize Disaster Movie
Done
- The film later appeared on Empire's 2010 poll, The 50 Worst Movies Ever Remove the comma after poll; that is essential information not to be buried in an appositive.
Done
- Address the "who" tag next to Dave Filoni.
Sourcing and spot checks
[edit]Earwig catches Apple TV using our lead section for their actor profile, but there are no substantial concerns beyond that.
Is there a way to replace reference 8 (IMDB) for the cancellation of Point Pleasant? Certainly there is some media coverage of its cancellation that is more reliable. Or at least that he was in the series.
- I found another source.
Five sources were selected for spot checks. To replace #5, I spot checked another source:
- 4: Someone else won Manhunt.
- 5: Unsure what I'm looking for on this Rotten Tomatoes page.
- This was to verify the appearance of another celebrity; it no longer serves any puspose, so I removed it.
- 7: This source doesn't mention Lanter, though it does mention the quick cancellation,
- 14: Appearance of Disaster Movie at #14 on the 50 Worst Movies list.
- 26: UPI piece on Matt Lanter's appearance in Timeless including mention of both its cancellations.
- 30: article on starwars.com mentions Lanter's roles. I'd accept this. Do add the author information.
Other items
[edit]- Archive references with IABot (it's back!).
Done
- There are two Creative Commons-licensed images. Add alt text.
Done