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Reviewer: Cyclonebiskit (talk · contribs) 20:13, 6 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]


First review in a long while, but I'll be checking over this article. Will post comments later today. ~ Cyclonebiskit (chat) 20:13, 6 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Lead
  • The lead for an article this size should only be two paragraphs, comments below should help reduce the size.
  • "The disturbance rapidly organized and became a tropical depression and then a tropical storm on August 24." — Not supported by TCR
  • "On August 26, Dorian passed over Barbados and entered the Caribbean Sea, then made landfall in St. Lucia the next day." — The article uses UTC for dates so this would be on the same day (01:30 and 11:00 UTC, respectively).
  • "Initially predicted to move west-northwest and strike Hispaniola, Dorian's track instead shifted further north and east as the storm neared the Greater Antilles. The storm turned further towards the northwest as it traveled through a weakness in a ridge, missing Puerto Rico to the east on August 28." — Too much detail for the lead, just say it tracked farther north and east than anticipated.
  • "The storm developed an eye in satellite imagery soon after, but dry air still continued to disrupt the system. The commencement of an eyewall replacement cycle on August 29 temporarily impeded intensification, but Dorian completed the cycle the next morning and soon resumed strengthening." — Too much detail for the lead, just say intensification temporarily stagnated.
  • "A spurt of rapid deepening beginning August 30 saw Dorian develop a distinct, sharply-defined eye within a symmetric central dense overcast." — There's no mention of a central dense overcast in the body of the article for the period referenced.
  • "Steady weakening took place thereafter as Dorian moved over Grand Bahama and slowed to a standstill due to the collapse of the aforementioned steering ridge; however, Dorian remained a major hurricane until it began to move away from the Bahamas late on September 3, after which Dorian weakened into a Category 2 hurricane." — run on sentence.
  • "On September 5, Dorian moved over the Gulf Stream. The warm waters rejuvenated the system, allowing it to briefly reintensify into a major hurricane off the coast of Georgia." — The Gulf Stream is not mentioned anywhere else in the article. This can also be condensed into one sentence: "On September 5, Dorian briefly reorganized into a Category 3 hurricane as it traversed the warm waters of the Gulf Stream."
Origins and track through the Lesser Antilles
  • "Convection" is used in three consecutive sentences at the start of the first paragraph. Condensing these usages or using synonyms is preferable.
  • "As the wave traveled westward across the low latitudes of the Atlantic..." — The link to tropics here seems inappropriate for "low latitudes". The tropics are a much broader region than what is considered low-latitude for hurricanes.
  • "...however, it quickly organized into a tropical depression at 06:00 UTC on August 24..." — Source does not support "quickly organized"
  • The description of Dorian's slow intensification as a tropical storm flip flops a lot with abundant uses of "however" and "despite". Streamlining this to describe it as intensification within somewhat adverse conditions followed by stagnation would improve the flow and be less confusing.
  • "The tropical cyclone continued westward under the influence of a subtropical ridge to its north." — No need to repeat what hasn't changed. This can be remedied by stating the westward movement was over a period of x days when you first mention it and include mention of the ridge there.
  • Removed but it would be OR to include the ridge that early on since the first/second mentions predate all NHC warnings and the TCR/TWOs never mention it either. NoahTalk 01:56, 7 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • The first four sentences of the second paragraph can easily be condensed to state the track shifted east from Hispaniola to east of Puerto Rico rather than mentioning it twice. The cause of the change in track should be mentioned earlier.
  • The intensification over the Virgin Islands can be smoothed out to simply say it was intensifying as it traversed the islands rather than saying it was intensifying, made landfall, and then was intensifying.
  • I never cut off the intensification. I said it strengthened as it was making landfall and then showed it at a stronger intensity on the second island. I did cut out all the detail of specific intensities at each landfall and simplified it into one sentence. NoahTalk 02:15, 7 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • The temporary stagnation of intensification can be described as such, it doesn't need to be so drawn out. State that a temporary increase in wind shear and dry air halted the intensification. The exact speed of the shear isn't needed, most readers have no context for what that means.
Rapid intensification and landfalls over the Bahamas
  • A link to rapid deepening should be included somewhere
  • "With Dorian passing over sea surface temperatures of 29 °C (84 °F), the NHC noted strengthening was unlikely to have ended." — This feels a bit unnecessary as there's nothing in the paragraph to indicate it would have weakened.
  • "... making Dorian the strongest hurricane to impact the northwestern Bahamas on record." — This is stated too early, nothing prior indicates the hurricane was near the Bahamas. You can add that it was heading toward the Bahamas when mentioning the shift in movement.
  • "The system moved off the north coast of Grand Bahama six hours later still as a Category 5 hurricane..." — TCR has it moving off the northern coast as it weakened to a Category 4
Northward turn, extratropical transition, and dissipation
  • "Dorian began a northwestward motion late on September 3 after having stalled over the Bahamas, as a eastward-moving mid-level trough over the Eastern United States pulled Dorian to the north." — Mention where the storm is going (towards the US) rather than where it was.
  • "After about 12 hours, Dorian began to gradually weaken; increasing wind shear and dry air further contributed to the process." — Wind shear and dry air would be the initial cause not just an accelerant.
  • "Despite this, the storm still possessed a well-defined eye surrounded by deep convection." — what is this contrasting? The preceding sentence is about the landfall, there's nothing about the storm's structure.
  • "Early on September 7, Dorian began to undergo the transition to an extratropical cyclone. The eye completely disappeared from satellite imagery as the storm began to take on a more asymmetric structure.[32] The hurricane continued to weaken due to strong southwesterly shear, with most of its convection displaced to the north and east of the center.[33] Soon after, cold air clouds began to entrain on Dorian's southwestern side as the storm connected with a warm front that was developing to the northeast." — The TCR does not indicate weakening taking place during this transitionary period until the end.
  • "Despite this, the NHC opted to continue issuing advisories on the system due to the extreme threat it posed to Atlantic Canada." — Usage of "despite" is inappropriate here as it's standard procedure for the NHC to continue advisories on a system threatening land. The source also doesn't support it being an "extreme threat".
  • Not really inappropriate since it is saying that "despite being post-tropical, the advisories continued because it was threatening land". I doubt the readers would know the NHCs procedures and would be confused that they continued issuing on a non-tropical cyclone. NoahTalk 02:53, 7 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • "By September 9, virtually no convection existed near the center of Dorian." — source says "no significant convection" not convection altogether
Records
  • "...as well as the strongest in the Bahamas.[21] Dorian's 185 mph (295 km/h) landfalls on Abaco Island and Grand Bahama were the strongest on record for the island nation." — Redundant mentions of it being the strongest in the Bahamas. TCR states only one of the landfalls was at peak intensity.
Other
  • Prose used mdy for dates while the refs had inconsistent formatting. I've gone ahead and swapped all dates to mdy.
  • Images are all public domain and usable
  • No copyvio issues
  • References are stable and/or archived and reliable

A prominent issue in the article is wordiness, especially in early parts. Things are stated more times than necessary and in separate sentences when it can be smoothed out concisely. Some article links are in weird places later in the article than they should be. For example, SSTs, convection, and maximum sustained winds are linked in the third section. Links should be at their earliest mention and only once. Placing the article on hold to allow time for corrections. ~ Cyclonebiskit (chat) 22:15, 6 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]

@Cyclonebiskit: Is there anything else that should be done for GA and prep for FAC? NoahTalk 18:11, 7 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Well done to both of you, I'm passing the article. My review covers what was needed for GA-criteria. Additional work is needed for FAC; however, an editor with a sharper eye than myself would be better for that kind of assessment. ~ Cyclonebiskit (chat) 20:29, 7 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
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