Talk:Mit Gas/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Puffin (talk · contribs) 16:00, 13 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]

I will review it. Puffin ^{Let's talk!} 16:00, 13 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall:
Pass/Fail:

Lead

by the musical supergroup Tomahawk - you could possibly link Tomahawk
Done. GRAPPLE X 16:53, 13 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]
The lead could be expanded slightly, with more information, such as Despite receiving positive reviews, the band did not release any singles or record any music videos in support the album
Added. GRAPPLE X 16:53, 13 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Production

Tomahawk is a musical supergroup composed of → Tomahawk is a musical supergroup consisting of
Sure this. GRAPPLE X 16:54, 13 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]
Mike Patton, vocalist for Faith No More and Mr. Bungle; Duane Denison, guitarist for The Jesus Lizard; → Mike Patton, vocalist for Faith No More; Mr. Bungle; Duane Denison, guitarist for The Jesus Lizard;
I think you've misread it here, "Mr. Bungle" is another band that Patton was in, rather than a person. A semicolon would be breaking it up incorrectly. GRAPPLE X 16:54, 13 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]
Tool's guitarist Adam Jones offered to direct a video but this was declined. → Tool's guitarist Adam Jones offered to direct a video but declined. - or didn't he? Who declined the offer?
Source just says the band declined the offer, so I've added "by the band". GRAPPLE X 16:54, 13 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Personnel

It would be good to introduce the section with the source where the credits came from.

Can you provide a citation for these?

You need to use — here

Well the source is the album itself, so it seems a bit odd to source it to itself (it's essentially the same source that's giving the track listing and times, the cover and the title, etc). I guess I could use {{Cite album-notes}} if you'd like but it seems a bit circular. Have replaced the dash symbols with dash code, though I don't know what difference that makes (not exactly a tech savvy kind of guy here :P) GRAPPLE X 16:58, 13 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Release and reception

[step] out of the shadows" of their previous careers. → [step] out of the shadows" of their previous careers." - you forgot to close the quotation marks

Quote was closed at "shadows"; the quoted part is "[step] out of the shadows". GRAPPLE X 16:59, 13 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Chart performance

It also attained a peak of 7 on the → The album also attained a peak of 7 on the

Mit Gas also charted in Norway, making it to number 17 → The album also charted in Norway, making it to number 17

staying in that chart for two weeks. → staying there for two weeks - the word chart is repeated a lot

All of the above done. Thanks for such a quick review! GRAPPLE X 17:00, 13 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]