Talk:Mixed Signals/GA1
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Reviewer: Aoba47 (talk · contribs) 19:16, 11 December 2017 (UTC)
- Grabbing this for a review if that is okay with you. Aoba47 (talk) 19:16, 11 December 2017 (UTC)
- Lead and infobox
- For this sentence (It received generally favourable reviews from music critics who highlighted the song on the album and compared it to the previous works by The Killers.), please add a comma after “critics”.
- For this part (was released in late February 2017), is there a reason that you do not use the exact date in which the video was released?
- Development and production
- For this part (Talking to The Sun, Williams recalled the first time when he heard the song), I would use Williams’ full name as this is the first moment in which you discuss him in the body of the article.
- This sentence (Eventually, the band gave the song to Williams and let him record it for his eleventh studio album, The Heavy Entertainment Show (2016).) needs a citation.
- For this part (He posted a short snippet of "Mixed Signals" and wrote), I do not believe the (of “Mixed Signals”) part is necessary as it is obvious from the context of the rest of the paragraph.
- Composition
- Please put the number in numerals in the following part (and fifty-eight seconds).
- This part (with a length of three minutes and fifty-eight seconds.) requires a citation.
- I would recommend changing this part (accompanied by synths present in the 2000s) to something like (accompanied by synths usually present in tracks from the 2000s). Also, you will need to full spell out synthesizers and link it as it is the first time that the concept is used in the body of the article.
- This is a clarification question, but has there been an critical discussion on the lyrics (i.e. the song’s content)?
- Digital Spy should be in italics.
- For this part (that sounds like a "Runaways" from The Killers's 2012 studio album), please provide a link to “Runaways”.
- Critical reception
- I would either combine the second paragraph with the first, or add a topic sentence to the second paragraph.
- Drowned in Sound should be in italics.
- You need to have a part on the song’s commercial performance somewhere in the article.
- Music video
- Please provide ALT text for the images.
- Evening Standard should be the London Evening Standard.
- This (putting her lingerie, stockings and belt.) should be this (putting on her lingerie, stockings and belt.)
- This (Whilst she is getting dress) should be this (Whilst she is getting dressed).
- This (he finds the picture of the man and wanders who he is and if she cheated on him.) should be this (he finds the picture of the man and wonders who he is and if she cheated on him.)
- Unlink Digital Spy as it was linked in a previous section and put it in italics.
- Live performances
- Good work with this.
- Credits and personnel
- I would move this (Credits adapted from the liner notes of The Heavy Entertainment Show (Columbia Records). to the top of the section.
- Final comments
- Good work on this. Once my comments are addressed, I will pass this. Have a wonderful day or night. Aoba47 (talk) 21:52, 11 December 2017 (UTC)
Hi @Aoba47:, thanks for reviewing the article and sorry for the late response, I was doing some pre-Xmas traveling. I think I resolved all of the issues pointed above :). Feel free to double check. — Tom(T2ME) 19:46, 18 December 2017 (UTC)
- Verdict
- Thank you for addressing everything. I hope you had a wonderful time with your travels. Have a great rest of your day or night. Aoba47 (talk) 19:49, 18 December 2017 (UTC)
The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.