Talk:Moment of Silence (song)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: MaranoFan (talk · contribs) 21:16, 18 April 2019 (UTC)[reply]

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"It was received with mixed reviews from music critics" → "It received mixed reviews from music critics"
"Winning the Romanian pre-selection show Selecția Națională, "Moment of Silence" was selected to represent Romania" → The repetition of "Romania" can be avoided if you substitute it with "the country" in the second part
"defaulted payments by the nation's national broadcaster, TVR" → Remove "nation's" since the word "national" gets the point across
"On 14 July 2016, "Moment of Silence" was digitally released as a single by Roton, credited to his band Anton" → There is something off about this sentence since you're using the word "his" to refer to a record label. I would reframe this sentence to "On 14 July 2016, "Moment of Silence" was digitally released as a single by Anton, through Roton".

Background and reception

First paragraph has no issues
The second paragraph should begin with the sentence "'Moment of Silence' received mixed reviews from music critics" to summarize it.
The descriptor used for Europe should be "band" instead of "group" according to the article

Eurovision attempt and promotion

Teodora Dinu should be introduced as "fellow Eurovision contestant" or something like that to give context, since she doesn't have an article.
"This has led to strong reactions against the decision, including from Anton" → Remove "has"
"Romania would return to the Eurovision Song Contest in 2017." → This doesn't seem too relevant to this article, but removing it is optional since it doesn't do any harm.
Either "promote" or "support" can be removed from the first sentence of the third paragraph since either word gets the point across

Anton version

Both the sections: "Track listing" and "release history" should be removed since, a) It can't be a track "listing" if there aren't more than one tracks, and b) the release history section shouldn't include a table since there aren't more than one entries there either.
I would suggest removing the infobox altogether since the band does not have its own article/notability, so the infobox is adding WP:UNDUE weight and will collide with the references once the sub-sections are removed

Overview

Will gladly promote this once everything is addressed.--N Ø 06:52, 21 April 2019 (UTC)[reply]

@MaranoFan: Hi again and thanks for the review. I have done everything except the last points. I have seen several articles using a "Release history" and a "Track listing" section even though there was one entry each, and I think this should stay like it stands right now. Also, for the infobox, this should stay since it was released as a single and it received a cover artwork, regardless of the band's notability. I will also get to your GAN in the next few days. Greets; Cartoon network freak (talk) 07:33, 21 April 2019 (UTC)[reply]