Talk:My First Kiss/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: ΣПDiПG–STΛЯT 15:57, 6 December 2010 (UTC)

Lead

• The first few sentences are quite repetitive.
• "My First Kiss" is the first single by electronic group, 3OH!3 from their third album, Streets of Gold. It was released as the album's lead single on May 4, 2010. How about — "My First Kiss" is a song by American electronic duo 3OH!3. The song was written by Lukasz Gottwald, Sean Foreman, Nathaniel Motte and Benjamin Levin, and produced by Dr. Luke and Benny Blanco for 3OH!3's third studio album, Streets of Gold. It was released as the album's lead single on May 4, 2010.
• Change to duo, as there are only 2 members.
• Credit their legal names as writers.
• No need to mention Kesha being a part of the writing if she isn't credited in the lead, as it's later in the writing.

 Done for the most part. Im leaving Kesha as its relative as its explains why she is on the song.

Infobox

• 300x300 version of the cover so it fits the infobox properly.

✗ Not done Images from 200- 300 fit the infobox.

• Link digital download.

 Done

• Legal names for writing credits.

 Done

Writing and inspiration

• A little expansion would be nice.

✗ Not done i would if i could, but its not possible.

Music and lyrics

• Re-title to composition.

 Done

Critical reception

• Can Digital Spy really be considered Critical reception?
• I suggest removing the Digital Spy review and adding more of a professional critic's view of the song.

✗ Not done All reviews included are professional and meet WP:FA standards, Digital Spy is a respectable reviewer.

Live performance

• If there's only there's no need for there to be a section on it. I suggest just adding it to the lead, or removing it all together.

✗ Not done According to WP:LEAD it music have its own section or cannot be included in the lead.

Track listing

• Change title to Formats and track listings
• And show it as follows... (or something similar).

• Digital Download

1. "My First Kiss" – 3:12

• Digital EP (International)

1. "My First Kiss" (Gucci Mane Remix) – 3:12
2. "My First Kiss" (Chuckie Extended Version) – 7:34
3. "My First Kiss" (Innerpartysystem Remix) – 5:07
4. "My First Kiss" (Music Video) – 3:20

• Digital EP (UK)

1. "My First Kiss" – 3:12
2. "My First Kiss" (Chuckie Remix) – 3:39
3. "My First Kiss" (Chuckie Extended Version) – 7:34
4. "My First Kiss" (Innerpartysystem Remix) – 5:07
5. "My First Kiss" (Skeet Remix) – 4:42

✗ Not done "International" does not work as it was only released in the UK in this format and there that is not an appropriate titling.

At least get rid of "feat" part as it is unneeded. ΣПDiПG–STΛЯT 22:15, 6 December 2010 (UTC)

Release history

• Was the song not released digitally in the US?
• Any radio add on dates that can be added?

✗ Not done No it was not, it was original but got merged into the album once it was release so link is dead and had to be removed, and there is not archive of a radio add.

External links

• Not necessarily an important part of the article.

✗ Not done This is how music videos are linked as they are no longer acceptable in the info box.

GA review (see here for criteria)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:

ΣПDiПG–STΛЯT 22:26, 6 December 2010 (UTC)

The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.