Talk:My Worlds Acoustic/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Novice7 (talk) 03:37, 22 April 2011 (UTC)[reply]

DAB/EL Check:
- No Dab links.
- No dead or redirect links.

Media: File:Myworldsacoustic.jpg needs a specific source (maybe a link to Amazon)

Lead

Sold exclusively at Walmart retail stores and Sam's Club wholesale stores, the album was released on November 26, 2010. – I suggest rearranging this sentence, maybe to something like "The album was released on _____, and was sold exclusively on Walmart...."
was released on iTunes – maybe released "to" iTunes?
As the album experienced more success in Canada, mention the Canadian chart first, and then US. Also, can you mention that the album was certified Platinum by the CRIA?

Background and marketing

Days later, on October 24, 2010, Bieber revealed that – Bieber → he (to avoid repetition)
...who say he cannot sing and saying his voice was auto-tuned, and that... – "saying", "say" redundancy?
Link string quartet, congas. Also, change cajon drum to cajón drum and link it.
Bieber talked about the songs initial writing – songs → song's
stating the song was influenced – stating "it" was influenced
"Pray" was performed at the 2010 American Music Awards. "Pray" debuted and was performed for the first time at the 2010 American Music Awards. – "Pray" repeats.
through the performance Bieber arose from the piano and took center stage, he was accompanied by – replace the comma with a semi colon (I think I'm correct)
'The performance was ended with Bieber – remove "was"
kneeling singing the songs title, – songs → song's
Also, I suggest splitting the sentence.
After originally being available for at Walmart and Sam's Club first – is something missing in between?
By the way, is the description of "Pray"'s performance needed? I feel it fits better on the song article.

It is on the song's article, so I just added the little bits to flesh out the background :) Candy o32 17:17, 7 May 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Lol, fine then. Novice7 (talk) 17:36, 7 May 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Chart performance

The album debuted at number seven – The album → My Worlds Acoustic. Also, as Bieber is Canadian, I feel Canada should be mentioned first.
with 115,000 copies sold in the first week released. → "with 115,000 copies sold in its first week of release".
Lead says "top-ten", but the section says "top ten". Can you make it consistent?
After fluctuating on the chart for weeks, due to the album being available for digital download on iTunes, the album returned to the top-ten of the Billboard on the chart dated February 26, 2011. – can you rearrange this sentence for better flow?
The album was subsequently certified platinum the same month it was released, – remove "subsequently". Also, mention CRIA certified it and also the base shipments/sales.
Can you mention something about Brazilian chart?

Critical reception

Please move this section and place it above Chart performance section (critics get a copy of the album before the original release, I suppose)
Lucy Jones of The Daily Telegraph said with catchy – said "that" with..
and melodies - the best parts of any Bieber record - are stripped – is the "-" an em-dash?
saying that it was "the – was → is?

References

Ref 5 coding error (publisher is missing)
Look out for overlinking.

I was told previously it was fine in the refs as long as it was consistent? Candy o32 17:17, 7 May 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Hmmm.. I was told the opposite, lol. Novice7 (talk) 17:36, 7 May 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Ref 12 – a stray "<?ref>" ??
Ref 16 – Allmusic's publisher is Rovi Corporation
Ref 18,19,22 – publishers needed

I remember a while back in the Ciara FLC review, Legolas said that if the publisher and work are very similar (ex. work = Amazon.com, publisher=Amazon Inc), that only one was needed. Candy o32 17:17, 7 May 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Aah, okay. Novice7 (talk) 17:36, 7 May 2011 (UTC)[reply]

A great job as always. On hold for seven days. Novice7 (talk) 17:14, 24 April 2011 (UTC)[reply]

I'm very much happy with the improvements. Passing. Novice7 (talk) 17:36, 7 May 2011 (UTC)[reply]