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Reviewer: Ruby2010 talk 03:21, 4 March 2011 (UTC)
I will review the article sometime in the next day or two. Ruby2010 talk 03:21, 4 March 2011 (UTC)
- It is reasonably well written.
- It is factually accurate and verifiable.
- a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
- a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
- It is broad in its coverage.
- a (major aspects): b (focused):
- a (major aspects): b (focused):
- It follows the neutral point of view policy.
- Fair representation without bias:
- Fair representation without bias:
- It is stable.
- No edit wars, etc.:
- No edit wars, etc.:
- It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
- a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
- a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
- Overall:
- Pass/Fail:
- Pass/Fail:
Comments:
- The plot needs some work that it flows better. For instance, He collapses. It is kidney failure and Peter needs a new one. sounds awkward. How about: He collapses from kidney failure, and is told he needs a new kidney.
- Done. Gage (talk) 03:26, 5 March 2011 (UTC)
- In the plot section, all the characters need links to their own articles (Peter, Lois etc).
- Done. Gage (talk) 03:26, 5 March 2011 (UTC)
- The production section could be expanded a little, but I understand appropriate content is sometimes difficult to find.
- I've added as much existing information that I could possibly add, and believe it is sufficient. Gage (talk) 03:26, 5 March 2011 (UTC)
- After becoming Jaundiced, Peter says he "feels like he can go on for another 20 years" referencing The Simpsons long run and their trademark yellow skin. Needs a reference.
- I've removed the statement. It was added by someone else, and I believe it is completely original research. I doesn't belong in the article. Gage (talk) 03:28, 5 March 2011 (UTC)
- The Reception section only contains reviews from two critics. Find a few more please.
- I've added the only other review from a reliable source that is available, and I believe the section is now more than sufficient in its coverage of reception of the episode. Gage (talk) 03:37, 5 March 2011 (UTC)
I'll put the review on hold for seven days while you look through my comments. Thanks, Ruby2010 talk 18:40, 4 March 2011 (UTC)
- It all looks good. Pass for GA. Great work! Ruby2010 talk 03:44, 5 March 2011 (UTC)