Talk:New York State Pavilion/GA1

GA Review

Passed. Rollinginhisgrave (talk) 18:03, 3 August 2024 (UTC)[reply]

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Nominator: Epicgenius (talk · contribs) 01:08, 19 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Reviewer: Rollinginhisgrave (talk · contribs) 04:36, 3 August 2024 (UTC)[reply]

I'll take this one. This will be the last of your nominations I review for a few weeks to ensure variety in reviewers. Rollinginhisgrave (talk) 04:36, 3 August 2024 (UTC)[reply]

General comments

Adding content as I go.

Finished this up. Not many things noted, mainly clarifications. Rollinginhisgrave (talk) 06:47, 3 August 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Sorry, didn't see you were on holidays. No rush, have a go at it when you get back. Rollinginhisgrave (talk) 11:31, 3 August 2024 (UTC)[reply]

@Rollinginhisgrave, no problem. Actually, I can take a look at these right now - I still have some internet access. – Epicgenius (talk) 17:28, 3 August 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Prose and contents

Fashion firms had asked the state government for permission to stage fashion exhibits in the Tent of Tomorrow in November 1962 They wanted to use it in 1962 or asked in 1962?
- They asked in 1962. I've changed this. Epicgenius (talk) 17:51, 3 August 2024 (UTC)[reply]
The Tent of Tomorrow hosted concerts and fashion shows[45][46] and was one of two locations (along with the Better Living Center) where fashion shows were staged. repetition of fashion shows
- Fixed. Epicgenius (talk) 17:51, 3 August 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Hundreds of civil rights activists organized a sit-in at the pavilion during the opening ceremony and were arrested. because of the underemployment of African Americans?
- I don't think the protests were about the underemployment of African Americans specifically. It was part of a larger civil-rights protest targeting the World's Fair. Epicgenius (talk) 17:51, 3 August 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Tent of Tomorrow's decaying map Introduce the map here.
- Done. Epicgenius (talk) 17:51, 3 August 2024 (UTC)[reply]
all of these plans were canceled due to the high cost of restoration. Did the proposals make it into the planning stage?
- They did not. Epicgenius (talk) 17:51, 3 August 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Should be changed from saying there were plans if they were just proposals, especially since proposals can't be "cancelled" Rollinginhisgrave (talk) 18:02, 3 August 2024 (UTC)[reply]

The feasibility study was completed in the late 1990s, while the rest of the pavilion continued to rot.[145] redundant that the rest of the pavilion degraded while the study was being completed. What were the conclusions?
- I actually had another look at the source - they were still working on the study at the time. (Later sources don't explicitly mention this study, but they do mention several other proposals, such as the 2001 aviation-museum proposal that's mentioned in the article. Epicgenius (talk) 17:51, 3 August 2024 (UTC)[reply]
known during the World's Fair Block 46 as Block 46?
- Fixed. Epicgenius (talk) 17:51, 3 August 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Several small planters were also placed around the map. In 2019 or originally?
- I've clarified this - it was part of the original design. Epicgenius (talk) 17:51, 3 August 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Indiana's mural tricked some visitors into believing that the Theaterama was a restaurant, so the lights on his mural had to be turned off. could you clarify what this means?
- I've reworded this as well. Basically, the words "Eat" tricked people into thinking that they could actually eat there. Epicgenius (talk) 17:51, 3 August 2024 (UTC)[reply]
The modern theater's entrance is through the "nebula" structure and this as well. Does it just mean a ring?
- The "nebula" is the informal name of the annex that was built in the 2000s. Epicgenius (talk) 17:51, 3 August 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Suggestions

Use pronouns in the discussion of the mezzanine to avoid repetition.
- Done. Epicgenius (talk) 17:51, 3 August 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Sources

Spot check

1) In the years immediately after the fair, the Tent of Tomorrow hosted events such as a judo competition.

2) and a local company offered to pay $6 million to renovate the tent into a roller rink.

3) UCF began scanning the pavilion that June.

4) Each cable measures 2.5 inches (6.4 cm) thick.

5) Supposedly as retribution for the removals, Warhol created silkscreened portraits of Robert Moses, to which Johnson objected.

Other

Images appropriately tagged Y
Stable Y
Neutral Y
COPYVIO/OR Y
Broad in its coverage Y

Rollinginhisgrave (talk) 06:26, 3 August 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for the review. I've now addressed all the issues you brought up. Epicgenius (talk) 17:51, 3 August 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Just one point about plans/proposals left. I won't hold up the review and just pass it, if you can address it how you see fit when you have the time. Thanks for another easy review. Rollinginhisgrave (talk) 18:02, 3 August 2024 (UTC)[reply]

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