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Peer Review for Oral Imunotherapy Article

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This article does a great job at defining and explaining what OIT is and why its important and being studied. There are a few points that could use some tweaking though. In the intro, you say "However, almost every study has excluded patients with severe allergen-induced anaphylaxis, the population most in need of treatment." You included a source, but it still sounds like this is your opinion instead of medical fact. I would change this to say "causes the most allergen related hospitalizations" or something along those lines (I have no idea if what I suggested is true) to present this point as a fact and not the author's opinion.

The Mechanism of Action section should be longer. You describe what is happening and you provide many links for the complex parts of the section, but you don't really expand on what is happening in simpler terms. Explain why the involvement/deletion of certain cells is important to fighting allergies, etc.

The Current Research section was very informative, however you did not provide sources for the first and second study discussed in the section. The rest of the section is great, but I need to see sources to the studies you discuss.

Joeygrill (talk) 15:41, 6 April 2015 (UTC)[reply]


Merged

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To Allergen immunotherapy. All forms can be discussed together. Doc James (talk · contribs · email) 07:47, 17 June 2015 (UTC)[reply]