- Thanks. It's too short to send to FAC for my taste, but I'd nevertheless like to get it as good as possible, so please do make suggestions that go beyond the GA criteria. Ucucha 21:05, 24 March 2010 (UTC)
"A distinctive species, it may have been…" distinctive -> distinct, but maybe it's too early to introduce this qualifier. I'd prefer if the lead were expanded a sentence or three to summarize the taxonomy section and the fact that it wasn't always considered a unique species. "On the basis of" -> Based on
I know we've had similar discussions before, but would it be possible to give a bit of background about the discovery and the people involved? Were Nelson and Goldman American? Was this discovery part of some mammalogical expedition? Who was Merriam and why was he the one describing the species?
- I expanded this with what little information I could glean from Merriam's and Nelson's papers.
"…Hershkovitz listed it as another subspecies of Oryzomys palustris" maybe "another" should just be "a", as the other subspecies weren't discussed previously
- I attempted to emphasize that Hershkovitz included many subspecies in O. palustris, and reworded it to get that point across more clearly.
"Goldman considered O. nelsoni to be closest to the nearest mainland subspecies of O. couesi, O. couesi mexicanus." closest -> closely related? (reduce confusion - some might think you mean geographical distance)
- I think the images should have captions that at least tell us if they're top or bottom views
Should avoid starting new paragraphs with abbreviations ("O. nelsoni is part of the genus Oryzomys…"), but it might be best to reword this (seems obvious)
- Reworded. I did retain the piece about it being an Oryzomys, which may not be as clear to everyone and serves as a bridge between the previous piece, which is specific to O. nelsoni, and the following discussion of the entire genus.
maybe wink to section in taxonomy
- That's a specifically botanical term; "section" here is from Goldman, and seems peculiar to Oryzomys.
wlink ochraceous, buff
- Done for ochraceous; is it really necessary for buff, which seems a fairly common term?
"On the head and the back, dusky hairs somewhat darkened" dusky is a word I don't hear too often. Is there a more common synonym that could replace it? plumbeous, decurved could use links/defs
- Got rid of them instead.
- "In O. albiventer, the rostrum and incisors were not as massive, but the molars are larger." changes verb tense
- Don't blame me. I used present tense because the description is based on the four USNM specimens, which still exist, so that the traits also still exist, but can also see the argument for using past tense. What do you think?
where are the type specimens kept?
- USNM. Added.
I can't access these papers, but the following come up in a search:
- Title: Descriptions of three new Rodents from the Olympic Mountains, Washington.
- Author(s): Merriam, C. H.
- Source: P. Ac. Philad. Pages: pp. 352 & 353 Published: 1898
- Nothing. I guess someone referenced the wrong Merriam 1898 once.
- Title: Notes on geographic distribution, habitat, and taxonomy of some Mexican mammals
- Author(s): MUSSER, GUY G.
- Source: OCCAS PAPERS MUS ZOOL UNIV MICHIGAN Volume: 636 Pages: 1-22 Published: 1964
Thanks for the helpful comments! Ucucha 19:17, 25 March 2010 (UTC)
- Should this extinct species have a dagger symbol † in the taxobox?
- Thanks for the review. I fixed the dab link. Ucucha 22:25, 25 March 2010 (UTC)