Talk:Otro Día Más Sin Verte/GA1

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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 09:21, 5 July 2015 (UTC)[reply]

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I'm curious about the translation, it looks like a literal one, whereas the English song itself was translated as "Just another day without you", worth mentioning I think.

I am not a Spanish speaking person so I asked one of my friends here on Wikipedia who gave me the literal translation. There are no sources out there for the translation of the album title. jona ^(talk) 21:32, 7 July 2015 (UTC)[reply]

But you are aware that the English-language version of this song uses the lyrics "Just another day without you" aren't you? The Rambling Man (talk) 04:49, 8 July 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Yes I am aware of that. jona ^(talk) 14:58, 8 July 2015 (UTC)[reply]

So it should be added to the article for completeness. It uses the same music, and was Secada's breakthrough English-language track, it's worth noting here. The Rambling Man (talk) 20:24, 8 July 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Done jona ^(talk) 20:37, 8 July 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Our article on Emilio Estefan avoids the use of Jr.

Done jona ^(talk) 21:32, 7 July 2015 (UTC)[reply]

" who got the idea" clunky and unencyclopedic, particularly as you already said "The idea to..." earlier on. Rephrase.

Where is this in the article? jona ^(talk) 21:32, 7 July 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Third sentence in the lead. The Rambling Man (talk) 04:49, 8 July 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Done jona ^(talk) 14:58, 8 July 2015 (UTC)[reply]

"market potential" quote needs reference.

That paragraph is cited to the same page, just didn't want to overpopulate it. But Done jona ^(talk) 21:32, 7 July 2015 (UTC)[reply]

"becoming the first Latin artist to do so" no, something like "making Secada the first Latin artist to achieve the feat".

Done jona ^(talk) 21:32, 7 July 2015 (UTC)[reply]

"Secada became the first Hispanic artist of color to have a number one song on the Hot Latin Tracks chart." shouldn't this fact come when you first talk about number ones on the Latin Tracks chart?

Done jona ^(talk) 21:32, 7 July 2015 (UTC)[reply]

"was the backup vocalist for" she only had one? Or do you mean "was a backup vocalist"?

Fixed jona ^(talk) 21:32, 7 July 2015 (UTC)[reply]

"Secada became close friends with Gloria..." -> "He became...

Done jona ^(talk) 21:32, 7 July 2015 (UTC)[reply]

"The recording made up of" ->" The recording was made up of" or perhaps "The recording comprised"

Done jona ^(talk) 21:32, 7 July 2015 (UTC)[reply]

"According to Secada written in his autobiography," -> "According to Secada, writing in his autobiography,"

Done jona ^(talk) 21:32, 7 July 2015 (UTC)[reply]

"and wanted him to be a crossover" replace him with Secada for certainty.

Done jona ^(talk) 21:32, 7 July 2015 (UTC)[reply]

"Emilio met up with the" no need for "up with".

Done jona ^(talk) 21:32, 7 July 2015 (UTC)[reply]

"recognized the market potential" needs direct ref.

Done earlier remark. jona ^(talk) 21:32, 7 July 2015 (UTC)[reply]

" Behar requested Secada to record his first Spanish-language album to the head of EMI Records, Charles Koppelman, who accepted the proposal" -> "Behar suggested to the head of EMI Records, Charles Koppelman, that Secada should record his first Spanish-language album; Koppelman accepted the proposal." Or similar.

Fixed jona ^(talk) 21:32, 7 July 2015 (UTC)[reply]

"be comfortably fine with" -> "be comfortable with"

Fixed jona ^(talk) 21:32, 7 July 2015 (UTC)[reply]

"She also told them " who is "them", do you mean "him"?

Secada and Emilio. Fixed jona ^(talk) 21:32, 7 July 2015 (UTC)[reply]

"The album peaked at number four..." -> "Otro Día Más Sin Verte peaked at number four" to be sure which album you're referring to.

Fixed jona ^(talk) 21:32, 7 July 2015 (UTC)[reply]

"John Lannert of Billboard called "Angel" a "dramatic love ode",..." shouldn't this be after the description of "Angel", not "Cree En Nuestro Amor"?

Fixed jona ^(talk) 21:32, 7 July 2015 (UTC)[reply]

"as rock ballads " no need for "as".

Fixed jona ^(talk) 21:32, 7 July 2015 (UTC)[reply]

"Chuck Taylor of Billboard called Secada's new Spanish offerings as "tailored, uptempo Latin vibe."[17]" bad grammar, maybe "Chuck Taylor of Billboard called Secada's new Spanish offerings as having a "tailored, uptempo Latin vibe."[17]"

Fixed jona ^(talk) 21:32, 7 July 2015 (UTC)[reply]

"Seada became " typo.

Can't find this. jona ^(talk) 21:32, 7 July 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Second para of "Release and singles" section. You can use Control-F or Command-F (PC vs Mac) to search for specific phrases in the text... The Rambling Man (talk) 04:49, 8 July 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Done jona ^(talk) 14:58, 8 July 2015 (UTC)[reply]

María Teresa Vera has a diacritic on her "i".

Fixed jona ^(talk) 21:32, 7 July 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Weekly charts sorting messes up - suggest you just make it unsortable.

Fixed jona ^(talk) 21:32, 7 July 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Quite a few issues, mainly in the prose, so I'll place on hold for a week. The Rambling Man (talk) 12:56, 5 July 2015 (UTC)[reply]

@The Rambling Man: I have fix most issues you found. Thanks for the review, jona ^(talk) 21:32, 7 July 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Nearly there. The Rambling Man (talk) 20:24, 8 July 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Ok, I made a couple of format tweaks, but I'm happy this is GA quality, so passing. Good work. The Rambling Man (talk) 20:40, 8 July 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you =) jona ^(talk) 20:41, 8 July 2015 (UTC)[reply]