Talk:Percy LeSueur/GA1

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Reviewer: Mike Christie (talk · contribs) 15:19, 3 September 2022 (UTC)[reply]

I'll review this. Mike Christie (talk - contribs - library) 15:19, 3 September 2022 (UTC)[reply]

We don't have the original publication date for File:Percy LeSueur.jpg, but it looks like a cigarette card which would have been published at the time, so I'm going to assume that's OK. Sources are reliable; primary source (attestation) is OK for what it's used for.

"LeSueur won the Stanley Cup with the Ottawa, now nicknamed the Senators": should be "with Ottawa", not "with the Ottawa", surely?
"...a work similar to Arthur Farrell's handbook Hockey: Canada's Royal Winter Game, the first book published on ice hockey, 10 years earlier. Published right before the start of the 1910–11 season...": suggest "...a work similar to Arthur Farrell's handbook Hockey: Canada's Royal Winter Game, the first book on ice hockey, which had appeared 10 years earlier. Published right before the start of the 1910–11 season..." to avoid the repetition of "published" and to fix the connection of "10 years earlier" to its noun.
"LeSueur was an original member of Hockey Night in Canada's "Hot Stove League", a panel of hockey writers which discussed issues within hockey": suggest giving the date -- 1931 if our article on it is correct.
The "Career statistics" section is unsourced.

-- Mike Christie (talk - contribs - library) 15:46, 3 September 2022 (UTC)[reply]

@Mike Christie: Hi Mike, thanks for reviewing this, and sorry it took a few days to address these minor comments, I recently started a new job that's been eating up my time (on a similar note, very happy to see not too many changes are needed for this one!).

I've gone ahead and addressed points 1 and 2 as I agree.
With respect to giving a date, I would caution against this; although the program Hockey Night in Canada began in 1931, it is difficult to determine if the Hot Stove Panel that LeSueur was an inaugural member of began at the same time as Hockey Night, and there's not too much info publicly available online regarding the history of this segment. Because there's potential that the panel might have been a later addition, I would suggest we leave the existing tone with no explicit year. Happy to hear your thoughts.
The statistics citations are noted in the external links, but I have gone ahead and provided a citation in the Career Statistics section as well.
Re the date, how about just saying the 1930s? And perhaps add a hidden comment giving the explanation you just gave, so other editors won't try to add the 1931 date? Mike Christie (talk - contribs - library) 11:16, 10 September 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks a ton again. Spilia4 (talk) 06:40, 10 September 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Earwig finds this page, which I eventually figured out is almost certainly a copy from our article; I'm noting it here for the benefit of other editors. That page doesn't have enough archive.org history to prove it's a copy, but looking at Jack Marshall (ice hockey) and its equivalent article on that site shows it was copied from us on the date given at the foot of that page, so clearly the site is copying our articles.

Spotchecks:

FN 26 cites "In 1968, he was posthumously inducted as one of the 55 original members of the Ottawa Sports Hall of Fame." Verified.
FN 33 cites "His son, Steve Douglas, followed his father into radio broadcasting." Verified.

Spotchecks are fine. Just the suggestion about the date above left. Mike Christie (talk - contribs - library) 11:16, 10 September 2022 (UTC)[reply]

@Mike Christie: I've gone ahead and dated the statement in line with your GA suggestion after conducting some more research on the topic. All your comments have now been addressed. Spilia4 (talk) 16:33, 10 September 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Looks good; passing. Mike Christie (talk - contribs - library) 17:06, 10 September 2022 (UTC)[reply]