Talk:Pixel 6/GA1

GA Review

Passed. Sammi Brie (she/her • t • c) 06:26, 1 August 2022 (UTC)[reply]

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Reviewer: Sammi Brie (talk · contribs) 05:39, 31 July 2022 (UTC)[reply]

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
It is reasonably well written. a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists): It is factually accurate and verifiable. a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism): It is broad in its coverage. a (major aspects): b (focused): It follows the neutral point of view policy. Fair representation without bias: It is stable. No edit wars, etc.: It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate. a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall: Pass/Fail:
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@InfiniteNexus: Almost there. A handful of copy changes as well as some accessibility items with the table of color options. 7-day hold. Ping me when done. (Disclosure: I have a 6 Pro.) Sammi Brie (she/her • t • c) 06:11, 31 July 2022 (UTC)[reply]

@Sammi Brie: Thanks for reviewing this article! I believe all your concerns have been addressed. InfiniteNexus (talk) 06:08, 1 August 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Copy changes

Lead

Hyphenate "fifth-largest" (also in Commercial reception)
Done InfiniteNexus (talk) 05:53, 1 August 2022 (UTC)[reply]

History

in as early as 2016 — remove "in"
Done InfiniteNexus (talk) 05:53, 1 August 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Specifications

Add "an" before "extended warranty"
Done InfiniteNexus (talk) 05:53, 1 August 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Marketing

"as with" → "as well as"
"As well as" doesn't sound quite right, but I've adjusted the wording. InfiniteNexus (talk) 05:53, 1 August 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Reception

Does "Counterpoint Research" need to be italicized? It is not a publication but a company.
I've un-italicized all mentions of Counterpoint Research. InfiniteNexus (talk) 05:53, 1 August 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Source spot checks

I have randomly selected 10 citations for spot checks. All pass:

41 Y grammar correction as exclusive feature
42 Y digital car key
54 Y online commercials
56 Y major city billboards
59 Y (ABOUTSELF) NBA partnership
77 Y Tensor chip as anticipated
99 Y delays in 6 Pro shipments
111 Y 380% growth
130 Y temporary disabling of phone features
133 Y Max Kellerman discovery of Dirty Pipe

Other

Earwig catches almost entirely unavoidable formulations (including "Pixel 6 and Pixel 6 Pro"). Not a real concern.
UPSD catches three sources: an ABOUTSELF tweet, an attributed reviewer on YT, and a Lifehacker article. The Lifehacker article can probably go. The other two are fine.
References are archived.
Outside the infobox, the images need alt text. There are no licensing issues with the images.
Done InfiniteNexus (talk) 06:08, 1 August 2022 (UTC)[reply]
The table of colors needs a caption (MOS:DTAB).
Done InfiniteNexus (talk) 06:08, 1 August 2022 (UTC)[reply]

An observation, aside from GA review

This is one of the longest infoboxes I have seen in quite some time. Some of this is because of the listing of two sets of specs. However, I would like to recommend that someone consider what is truly needed in {{Infobox mobile phone}}, with these specific comments:

There are many data fields but no headers to logically organize their contents.
Slogan parameters have been removed from many infoboxes, e.g. Template talk:Infobox company/Archive 11#Slogans.
There may be too many data fields in general. See MOS:INFOBOXPURPOSE.

I speak from experience with the 2020 redesign of Infobox radio station, Infobox television station, and Infobox television channel.

To be honest, I'm not sure what can/should be removed here. I'm aware the infobox is rather long, and yes, it's probably because it includes the specifications for both phones. One way to shorten the length would be to use collapsible lists (see the Availability by region heading), but that would make it harder for readers to access the info. I would suggest elevating your concerns over at Template talk:Infobox mobile phone, though I don't know how many editors are active there. InfiniteNexus (talk) 06:08, 1 August 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Yeah, this isn't a concern of "yikes this is against GA" but me speaking as someone with experience in infobox management. Turns out that it was missing from a few projects that it probably belonged with, too. Sammi Brie (she/her • t • c) 06:24, 1 August 2022 (UTC)[reply]

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