Talk:Poetry for Neanderthals/GA1

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Nominator: Bsoyka (talk · contribs) 21:58, 7 August 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Reviewer: CursedWithTheAbilityToDoTheMath (talk · contribs) 22:32, 22 August 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Rate	Attribute	Review Comment
1. Well-written:
	1a. the prose is clear, concise, and understandable to an appropriately broad audience; spelling and grammar are correct.	"with a dedicated deck" It might be worth explaining what a dedicated deck is as the average reader may not know this. CursedWithTheAbilityToDoTheMath (talk) 22:32, 22 August 2024 (UTC)[reply] "The original idea was brought by a group of Lee's friends" I feel like this could be worded better. For example "the game was inspired by Lee's friends". CursedWithTheAbilityToDoTheMath (talk) 22:32, 22 August 2024 (UTC)[reply] "Because of the design of the game, it is also able to be played by groups using videoconferencing software such as Zoom, which permitted the growth of the game while people faced lockdowns." The wording here sounds a bit odd. maybe reword it to something like "The game is designed so that it can also be played using videoconferencing software which boosted the game's popularity during lockdowns". CursedWithTheAbilityToDoTheMath (talk) 22:32, 22 August 2024 (UTC)[reply] "Players form two teams and sit around a table, arranged by alternating teams." This sentence is a bit confusing. Are the teams chosen by other teams? This doesn't make sense. CursedWithTheAbilityToDoTheMath (talk) 22:32, 22 August 2024 (UTC)[reply] "When a player is named the Poet, a player next to them (from the other team) is named the Judge." Should poet and judge be capitalized in this setting? CursedWithTheAbilityToDoTheMath (talk) 22:32, 22 August 2024 (UTC)[reply] "If a team correctly guesses a one-point word, they earn that point and the Poet can choose to continue with the three-point word. Players cannot score more than three points for a single card." So if they get both the 1 point word and 3 point word correct what happens? CursedWithTheAbilityToDoTheMath (talk) 22:32, 22 August 2024 (UTC)[reply] "the Poet Point Slate and the Team Point Slate" Do these words need to be capitalized? CursedWithTheAbilityToDoTheMath (talk) 22:32, 22 August 2024 (UTC)[reply] "inflatable club being renamed the Spank Stick" Does "Spank Stick" need to be capitalized? CursedWithTheAbilityToDoTheMath (talk) 22:32, 22 August 2024 (UTC)[reply]
	1b. it complies with the Manual of Style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation.	The lede could be expanded a bit more. Specifically with who the game is intended for and other editions. CursedWithTheAbilityToDoTheMath (talk) 22:32, 22 August 2024 (UTC)[reply]
2. Verifiable with no original research, as shown by a source spot-check:
	2a. it contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline.	CursedWithTheAbilityToDoTheMath (talk) 22:32, 22 August 2024 (UTC)[reply]
	2b. reliable sources are cited inline. All content that could reasonably be challenged, except for plot summaries and that which summarizes cited content elsewhere in the article, must be cited no later than the end of the paragraph (or line if the content is not in prose).	"...describe experiences like passing a driving test..." The driving test part isn't supported by the source. CursedWithTheAbilityToDoTheMath (talk) 02:18, 23 August 2024 (UTC)[reply] "similar to other guessing games such as Taboo and Celebrity." Neither of the sources backs up the claim that it is similar to Celebrity. CursedWithTheAbilityToDoTheMath (talk) 02:18, 23 August 2024 (UTC)[reply] "In addition to the standard Poetry for Neanderthals game, Exploding Kittens has released other versions." This is a small thing but because this sentence is a stand alone sentence it needs to be sourced. This is easily fixed by just adding the sources you used in the next paragraph to this sentence. CursedWithTheAbilityToDoTheMath (talk) 02:18, 23 August 2024 (UTC)[reply] "Exploding Kittens also offers a "Grab & Game" edition of the game, which is intended to be travel-friendly and only contains sixty cards." The source you have linked here is currently a dead link and none of the archived versions were working either. Is there a different source you could use here? CursedWithTheAbilityToDoTheMath (talk) 02:18, 23 August 2024 (UTC)[reply]
	2c. it contains no original research.	Per above reasons. CursedWithTheAbilityToDoTheMath (talk) 02:18, 23 August 2024 (UTC)[reply]
	2d. it contains no copyright violations or plagiarism.	All content was put into the writers own words. CursedWithTheAbilityToDoTheMath (talk) 02:18, 23 August 2024 (UTC)[reply]
3. Broad in its coverage:
	3a. it addresses the main aspects of the topic.	"When a player is named the Poet, a player next to them (from the other team) is named the Judge." Who decides which player is the poet? CursedWithTheAbilityToDoTheMath (talk) 22:32, 22 August 2024 (UTC)[reply] After reading the manual I feel like you could have included a bit more information on the gameplay. For example the names of teams (using the team names would also make the gameplay section easier to understand). I suggest you go over the manual again and see what information you could include. CursedWithTheAbilityToDoTheMath (talk) 02:18, 23 August 2024 (UTC)[reply] "The NSFW edition uses different graphics and designs in line with its adult theme, such as the inflatable club being renamed the Spank Stick, but gameplay functions the same as the standard edition" I would also add that the NSFW version includes inappropriate words. CursedWithTheAbilityToDoTheMath (talk) 02:18, 23 August 2024 (UTC)[reply]
	3b. it stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style).	CursedWithTheAbilityToDoTheMath (talk) 22:32, 22 August 2024 (UTC)[reply]
	4. Neutral: it represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each.	CursedWithTheAbilityToDoTheMath (talk) 22:32, 22 August 2024 (UTC)[reply]
	5. Stable: it does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute.	CursedWithTheAbilityToDoTheMath (talk) 22:32, 22 August 2024 (UTC)[reply]
6. Illustrated, if possible, by media such as images, video, or audio:
	6a. media are tagged with their copyright statuses, and valid non-free use rationales are provided for non-free content.	CursedWithTheAbilityToDoTheMath (talk) 22:32, 22 August 2024 (UTC)[reply]
	6b. media are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions.	CursedWithTheAbilityToDoTheMath (talk) 22:32, 22 August 2024 (UTC)[reply]
	7. Overall assessment.	On hold until @Bsoyka: can address the issues above. There are a couple of things that I feel could be expanded on. I also feel the wording is a bit awkward at times. There are a couple of words that I'm not sure should be capitalized however I could be wrong about those so I will have to look into that more. The lede could be a bit longer as well. Some of the sources don't fully back up what is said in the article. One of the sources is also a dead link but I'm not sure if that disqualifies it from being a GA. Overall the article is good it just needs a few tweaks. CursedWithTheAbilityToDoTheMath (talk) 02:18, 23 August 2024 (UTC)[reply]