Talk:Pokémon Ruby and Sapphire/GA1

GA Review

This is the page I will use to review this article so please watch it. Gears of War 2 23:57, 2 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]

OK, thank you for taking the time to review this article, and I have this page watchlisted. Artichoker[talk] 00:56, 3 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Comments on Lead

The first sentence of the second paragraph needs a couple of cites.
- I don't think this needs a citation per WP:Lead section#Citations.
The third sentence of the second sentence needs a cite. Done

I suggest that the lead be re-organized in the following way: Paragraph 1 deals with names, release dates, who made it (development), etc. Paragraph 2 deals with Gameplay. Paragraph 3 deals with Critical Reception and sales Done
"selling millions of copies to become the best-selling games ever for the Game Boy Advance" needs a cite.
- According to WP's MoS, if the statement is already cited in the article (which it is), it doesn't need to be cited in the lead section. The Transmogrifier (talk) 03:33, 3 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Comments on the Setting and Plot section

The third sentence of the first paragraph needs a cite. Done
"-this is done by raising Poke'mon, defeating the Eight Gym Leaders for Gym Badges, and eventually challenging the Elite Four and the champion" that statement needs a cite. Done

Comments on the Gameplay section

The first sentence of the second paragraph needs a cite.
- This is already cited by the reference at the end of the paragraph.

Comments on the New Features section

Try to clarify the caption of the image. It's a bit confusing. Done

Comments on the Connectivity with other devices section

The second sentence of the first paragraph needs a cite. Done
The second sentence of the second paragraph needs a cite. Done

Comments on the Development section

The first sentence of the second paragraph needs a cite.
- This is already cited by the reference at the end of the paragraph.
The third sentence of the thrid paragraph needs a cite.
- This is already cited by the reference at the end of the paragraph.
The first and second sentences of the third paragraph needs cites.
- This is already cited by the reference at the end of the paragraph.
The first and second sentences of the last paragraph needs cites.
- This is already cited by the reference at the end of the paragraph.

One these problems have been attended to tell me. Thanks and cheers. Gears of War 2 02:39, 3 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]

I have fixed a few problems, and I shall fix the rest in the morning. Artichoker[talk] 03:01, 3 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Good. I look forward to premoting the article. I will not be able to premote it until about 2:00-300pm per church in the morning. Gears of War 2 03:03, 3 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]

I have addressed all of the concerns. Artichoker[talk] 14:23, 3 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]