Talk:Professor Layton and the Last Specter/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: GreatOrangePumpkin (talk · contribs) 12:30, 13 November 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Interesting video game; I never played it, but I played the first and the second installments with enjoyment. I will review it and will finish in 6 days at most.

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
there should be no references in the lead, except if it contains something controversial, see WP:LEADCITE. For example the same sentence "The game includes over 170 puzzles.[7]" is already in the "Puzzles" section, so we don't need the reference in the lead.
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall:
Pass/Fail:

Dabsolver check: ok
Checklinks check: ok
Reflinks check: ok
Fixed dashes
Since the developers are located in Japan, I replaced the date format to mdy, as it had different date formats.

Thank you so much for the review. I've removed the citations in the lead paragraph. Emmy Altava 22:11, 15 November 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Sorry that I stopped reviewing. I have a slight cold, so I might finish it today.--♫GoP♫_T ^C _N 14:25, 18 November 2011 (UTC)[reply]

"Picarat" is a currency, right? I only know it as I played the prior games, but other won't probably. Worth to explain in-text.

Is this any better?

"If the player believes they have"

I figured I was getting a bit wordy there.

""Third Eye" Jakes, provide further information." is there something missing here? I don't quite understand it. Maybe "to provide further information."?

He's called "Third Eye" because he, as a chief of police who claims never to have lost a criminal, is believed to know everything happening within the town. Citing that would probably be more trouble than it would be worth to most readers, though, and since I only call him that once I'll just remove it entirely.

Actually I meant the last clause, "provide further information." It is not linked with other clauses, and it is not clear who provide further information; She, Grosky or Jakes? Right now I think She and Grosky provide further information, if that is right you should combine the sentences, for example, "and they both provide information". Or alternatively change the first clause "She is joined by Inspector Grosky, " to "She and Inspector Grosky", then it is correct.--♫GoP♫_T ^C _N 13:39, 19 November 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Actually, they're trying to coax Jakes into providing further information. I've edited it a bit, will it suffice? Emmy Altava 18:02, 19 November 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Yes, now I understand it. I will now pass! =)

Ref 21: This is odd, as it is a review for Professor Layton and the Curious Village. It is an alleged source for "Little London", "Misthallery", etc

There is a review for Curious Village, but it should be 12... and it cites a detail about the gameplay, which has remained unchanged. Which probably isn't acceptable anyway, but I added it before the EU site (which is so much more informative than NA...) opened which has that detail anyway. Fixed. 21 should be a link to Level-5's announcement accompanying the game's release (and, naturally, contains those details), and that's what it shows up as on my screen, so I don't know what's going on here.

How reliable is Andriasang?

Consensus at WP:VG was that it was reliable as of here, because it's written by a longtime contributor of IGN and is cited pretty commonly by other reliable sources.

Ref 50: There is a formatting error

I actually knew about this, but I couldn't find it when I went back to fix it. It should be fixed now.

But all in all pretty nice

Thanks so much!

Fix this and I will pass. Regards.--♫GoP♫_T ^C _N 20:12, 18 November 2011 (UTC)[reply]

I've tried to address the mentioned problems. Emmy Altava 22:17, 18 November 2011 (UTC)[reply]