Talk:Pulse of the Early Brain/GA1
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Reviewer: Sammi Brie (talk · contribs) 18:18, 24 December 2022 (UTC)
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Most of the issues are copy tweaks. I do have a curiosity question about some offline sourcing, but I anticipate you're able to answer it. 7-day hold to 100cellsman. Sammi Brie (she/her • t • c) 18:55, 24 December 2022 (UTC)
Copy changes
[edit]- I notice twice mention of "universal acclaim", yet there is a 6/10 review in the template. Would "near-universal" be more accurate?
- "universal acclaim" comes from Metacritic, hence the statement having quotation marks.웃OO 22:36, 24 December 2022 (UTC)
- It is the fifth installment of the band's "Switched-On" series which collects the band's rarities, such as the EPs Simple Headphone Mind (1997) and Low Fi (1992), bonus and exclusive tracks from Chemical Chords (2008), and individual tracks from other albums, split singles and flexi discs. This sentence needs some comma and semicolon adjustment because one of the list items has commas in it and there is an incomplete appositive. Should be It is the fifth installment of the band's "Switched-On" series, which collects the band's rarities, such as the EPs Simple Headphone Mind (1997) and Low Fi (1992); bonus and exclusive tracks from Chemical Chords (2008); and individual tracks from other albums, split singles and flexi discs.
- It is a 1997 collaboration with Nurse with Wound which both tracks rework Stereolab's track "The Long Hair of Death" (previously released in a split single with Yo La Tengo and on Aluminum Tunes) into "euphoric, psychedelic motorik". The "which" feels out of place here structurally unless you meant "in which".
- It marks the first appearances of members Mary Hansen and Andy Ramsay, and contains The comma here should be removed. User:Sammi Brie/Commas in sentences (CinS)
- The "avant-garde sci-fi jazz" song "Symbolic Logic of Now!", was released The comma makes no sense here and should be removed. (Not a commas in sentences issue)
- The compilation has an original version of "Plastic Mile", which was re-recorded for Fab Four Suture in 2006, And a With the citations removed, you can more easily see that "and" should not be capitalized.
- followed by "Simple Headphone Mind" and "Trippin' With The Birds" in 3 August, and "Cybele's Reverie (Live at the Hollywood Bowl)" in 24 August. Two changes: remove the comma after "3 August" (CinS) and "in" to "on" both times.
- Low Fi had a separate 2022 digital re-release and the "Ronco Symphony" This needs a comma for CinS reasons as the "and" joins two otherwise independent sentences.
- Spell out numbers in "based on 7 reviews" and "acting as the first 6 tracks"
Sourcing and spot checks
[edit]Earwig's leading 42.5% from AV Club is very much goosed by song titles in addition to the used quote. I have no concerns.
References for spot checks:
- 8: Spotify does show this release date.
- 12: UK Independent Albums Chart for 9 September 2022 shows Pulse of the Brain at #3.
- 14: Scottish Albums Chart for 9 September 2022 shows Pulse of the Brain at #10.
- 20: Offline source review; cannot verify. Do they not publish all of their reviews online?
- Is there something wrong with 12 and 14? Not sure what to look for. 20 is a magazine publication too.웃OO 22:36, 24 December 2022 (UTC)
- 12 and 14 are fine. I should have put ticks on there. Oops. Sammi Brie (she/her • t • c) 22:24, 25 December 2022 (UTC)
- Overall I should have your concerns addressed now. 웃OO 01:00, 26 December 2022 (UTC)
Other items
[edit]- The only image is fair-use cover art with proper rationale and alt text.
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