Talk:Pyromaniac (Oh Land song)/GA1
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Reviewer: Freikorp (talk · contribs) 11:47, 1 September 2017 (UTC)
Another great article I'm tempted to pass immediately. Even less concerns on this one.
- "features a "woo-hoo" hook" - I found this very confusing. I'd suggest just losing it entirely, or at the very least, reword it so its clearer, something similar to how it appears in the next section.
- Done
- "It features the singer in a variety of fashions" - again, a little confusing. I assumed 'fashions' could be used interchangeably with 'outfits', though I felt the need to read ahead to make sure. I'd suggest changing to 'outfits'.
- Done
- Who is Anne Sofie Madsen? Why is she considered important enough to mention as the clothes designer? I'd suggest dropping this also.
- Done
- The article mentions the music video contains footage of the singer skinny dipping with a group of friends. This implies the video also contains full nudity. I'd mention the fact the music video cited features censor bars.
- Done±
That's all from me. Looking forward to passing this one too. Freikorp (talk) 11:47, 1 September 2017 (UTC)
- HI Carbrera. We're a few hours short of seven days since the review was completed. I've noticed you've had several other of your GANs reviewed recently, and accordingly might be feeling a bit overwhelmed. I'd be happy to leave this open for a little longer but if nothing is done after, say, 10 days, I'll close the nomination, which I think would be a shame since it's so close to passing. Freikorp (talk) 23:55, 7 September 2017 (UTC)
- Freikorp – Thank you very much for both the review and your patience. I'm incredibly grateful for it. I have addressed your concerns in the article. Thank you very much. Carbrera (talk) 03:28, 9 September 2017 (UTC).
- Very happy to be passing this. Well done. Freikorp (talk) 09:09, 9 September 2017 (UTC)
- Freikorp – Thank you very much for both the review and your patience. I'm incredibly grateful for it. I have addressed your concerns in the article. Thank you very much. Carbrera (talk) 03:28, 9 September 2017 (UTC).