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Reviewer: Wizardman Operation Big Bear 04:47, 8 October 2010 (UTC)[reply]

I'll review this tomorrow. Wizardman Operation Big Bear 04:47, 8 October 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks. FYI, I have requested a copyedit from GOCE for any prose issues. --Redtigerxyz Talk 15:48, 8 October 2010 (UTC)[reply]
Not a problem. Since a few others were failed, I'll hold off a review until the copyedit takes place, so long as it's relatively soon. Wizardman Operation Big Bear 15:54, 9 October 2010 (UTC)[reply]
User:SMasters has graciously copyedited the article. --Redtigerxyz Talk 15:30, 10 October 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Here are the issues I found:

  • "she is often depicted with him in legend and temple sculpture." Do you mean scripture, or are they actually in sculptures together?
"Rati and Kama are often pictured on temple walls as "welcome sculptures", symbols of good fortune and prosperity" --Redtigerxyz Talk 17:19, 11 October 2010 (UTC)[reply]
  • "but Shiva had turned to ascetic ways after death" after the death
Done.--Redtigerxyz Talk 17:19, 11 October 2010 (UTC)[reply]
  • "Kama goes to Mount Kailash with Rati and Madhu or Vasanta ("Spring"), and shoots his love-arrows at Shiva, or enters his mind and invokes desire." sentence should be in past tense.
Done. --Redtigerxyz Talk 17:19, 11 October 2010 (UTC)[reply]
  • "and shoots his love-arrows at Shiva, or enters his mind and invokes desire." the addition of the second part is a little confusing. If it's an either-or thing based on sources make that clearer.
Done. --Redtigerxyz Talk 17:19, 11 October 2010 (UTC)[reply]
  • "it is Shiva, who blesses Rati with the boon of Kama's resurrection" that comma isn't needed.
Done. --Redtigerxyz Talk 17:19, 11 October 2010 (UTC)[reply]
  • "Here, after the burning of Kama, Parvati thought how she could achieve Shiva now." A bit confused as to what this sentence means.
Done. --Redtigerxyz Talk 17:19, 11 October 2010 (UTC)[reply]
  • "Scholar Benton relates her birth" full name on first mention.
Done. --Redtigerxyz Talk 17:19, 11 October 2010 (UTC)[reply]

I'll put this on hold and give you a week to fix the issues. Wizardman Operation Big Bear 21:18, 10 October 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for the GA review. I hope all issues are addressed. --Redtigerxyz Talk 17:19, 11 October 2010 (UTC)[reply]
Everything looks good now, so I'll pass the article as a GA. Wizardman Operation Big Bear 02:24, 12 October 2010 (UTC)[reply]
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