Talk:Republic of the Congo at the 2016 Summer Paralympics/GA1

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Reviewer: Lemonade51 (talk · contribs) 20:59, 28 April 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Getting back into the groove of reviewing, just quibbles:

"Bouesso was the flagbearer in the 2016 Summer Paralympics Parade of Nations at the opening ceremony", isn't that slightly tautological? You may just want to remove the "at the" bit, or even 'Parade of Nations at the', so it's "Bouesso was the flagbearer at the 2016 Summer Paralympics opening ceremony."
Reworded, but I like the construction used, as both Wikilinks are interesting, one, the Parade has a list of the flagbearers, one is about the entire ceremony. Courcelles (talk) 21:07, 28 April 2018 (UTC)[reply]
"Bouesso was 19 years old at the time of the competition, having being born on 21 July 1997", grammatically that needs to be "having been born", but even then it's wordy. Could just simplify to "Bouesso was 19 years old at the time of the competition; he was born on..."
Done. Courcelles (talk) 21:07, 28 April 2018 (UTC)[reply]
" In the javelin throw, he recorded a mark of 29.72 metres, the best result he had recorded that season." need ref for BIB

It's the immediate following Ref 7. Note the "SB" by his result in the official report. Repeated citation again for clarity. Courcelles (talk) 21:07, 28 April 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Otherwise reads fine. No dabs, references formatted consistently. Shall pass when comments have been addressed.

Cheers, happy with changes, shall pass. Lemonade51 (talk) 21:30, 28 April 2018 (UTC)[reply]