Talk:Robert M. La Follette/GA2

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Reviewer: GhostRiver (talk · contribs) 01:14, 21 October 2021 (UTC)[reply]

I'll be taking a look at this (again)! I anticipate this review being somewhat quick, as all of the comments from my previous review should have been addressed. — Ghost River 01:14, 21 October 2021 (UTC)[reply]

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Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV ()

3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant ()

Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed

Lede

Delink "Wisconsin" per MOS:OVERLINK
Link "1900 gubernatorial election" to 1900 Wisconsin gubernatorial election
"Republican Party and the Democratic Party" → "with the Republican and Democratic Parties"

Early life

"eight monthes" → "eight months"

Early political career

House of Representatives

"protege" → "protégé"
No comma after "Author Jorn Brøndal wrote that"
"hlamed" → "blamed"

Gubernatorial candidate

"Democratic opponent – Louis G. Bomrich" → "Democratic opponent Louis G. Bomrich"

Governor of Wisconsin (1901–1906)

No comma or space needed after "implementation of primary elections"
Comma after "ultimately"
"state supreme court" → "state Supreme Court" with a link to Wisconsin Supreme Court

Senator (1906–1925)

Roosevelt administration (1906–1909)

Link demagogue
Mention some of the progressive measures Roosevelt declined to support
"Beginning with the 1908 presidential election" → "Beginning in 1908"

Taft administration (1909–1913)

Shift the photos up to the start of this section, purely for aesthetic reasons
"sixteen congressmen" → "16 congressmen" per MOS:NUM

Wilson administration (1913–1921)

Combine second and third paragraphs
"In many people's eyes throughout this period, La Follette was a traitor to his country because he was in effect supporting Germany." → "This earned the ire of many Americans, who believed that La Follette was a traitor to his country, effectively supporting Germany."

Harding–Coolidge administration (1921–1924)

"conservative Senator" → "conservative senator" (senator here being used as a descriptor, not a title)
Hyphen to en dash in "1920-21"

1924 presidential campaign

Either "By early 1924" or "in late 1923" can be excised
"quickly endorsed La Follette for president" → "quickly endorsed his presidential bid"
"and "Independent."" → "and "Independent"." per MOS:LQ
"La Follette's 16.6% showing" → "La Follette's 16.6 percent showing" per MOS:PERCENT

Death and legacy

Link bronchitis and pneumonia
"offered to his wife –" → "offered to his wife,"
"but she didn't accept the offer" → "but she declined the offer"
"After his death, La Follette's wife, Belle Case La Follette, remained" → "After her husband's death, Belle Case remained"
Link Robert M. La Follette Jr. in the first paragraph and delink in the second
"Democratic nominee for Governor of Wisconsin" → "Democratic gubernatorial nominee"

Everything else is already checked and has not been substantially changed! Putting on hold for now to allow nominator to address comments. — Ghost River 01:40, 21 October 2021 (UTC)[reply]

@GhostRiver – Thanks a lot for another taking a look. I have addressed all the comments, and have added just 2 more images, both in the public domain. How is it looking now? – Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 09:44, 21 October 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Everything looks good now, happy to pass! — Ghost River 13:46, 21 October 2021 (UTC)[reply]

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