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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 20:22, 6 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]


Comments

  • "she entered service later in 1887." you already said this, so delete, and then merge what's left of the sentence with the previous one.
  • "the National Steamship Company of Chicago, on December 30, 1899. While owned by the National Steamship Company, Ira H. Owen frequently " -> "the National Steamship Company of Chicago, on December 30, 1899, for whom she frequently "
  • "what would be known" become.
  • "storm had passed, Captain Keller looked" -> "he looked"
  • "The wreck of Ira H. Owen has not been located." avoid single-sentence paragraphs.
  • "had a stroke of" link for stroke?
  • "Steam for which was provided" for which what? Maybe just delete.
  • "hull number 14" infobox says "Yard number" 14, potentially confusing mixture in jargon.
  • "in Chicago, Illinois on " comma after Illinois.
  • "Ira H. Owen was involved in her first accident" -> "The first accident..." to avoid almost carbon-copy text.
  • "two-masted schooner Belle Brown" masted is overlinked.
  • "proceeded to head for" ->" headed for"
  • "laden with iron ore, Ira" overlinked.
  • No need to link fog.
  • "Owen proceeded to head for" see above.
  • "headed for" -> "proceeded to".
  • "$10,000 worth" inflate?
  • "eventually proved that" proved or proven?
  • "December 5, 1903 with" comma after 1903.
  • "Ann Arbor No.1 decided to tow" the boat decided?
  • "and fought the fire while" -> " and the fire was fought"
  • Could link car ferry.
  • What's upbound?
  • ""for Buffalo, New York.[16" overlinked.
  • "Thomas Honner. Honner, previously" quick repeat, merge.
  • "51-52." en-dash.
  • Likewise for all other page ranges in the refs.
  • Three spaced hyphens in the Sources section should be en-dashes.

That's it, on hold. The Rambling Man (Stay alert! Control the virus! Save lives!!!!) 16:45, 8 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]

@The Rambling Man: All done. GreatLakesShips (talk) 22:25, 8 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Ok, promoting, good work. The Rambling Man (Stay alert! Control the virus! Save lives!!!!) 08:03, 9 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]
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