Talk:Sakizaya people/GA1

On review (ON HOLD)

Im going to review this article, its quite late where i am though so its going to take some time, to get through it all. Realist2 (talk) 01:35, 3 April 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Firstly, there is no need for sources in the lead. Take them out and add them to the content of the article.

The lead is one huge chunk of writting, split it into 2.

Headings are not formatted correctly. Only the first letter of the first word should be a capital (unless it is a name or place). Ex, Modern Hitory should be Modern history.

There are RED links , sort these.

Take the "Society and Culture" as my example. The section is split up into little mini sections. Join it all together if practical. Do this elsewhere as well.

The anchestory section is so small it should either be expanded or added to the early history section.

After the "Ancestor Worship/Animism" (which needs that / replaced) heading you go straight into a new sub heading called "dito". There needs to be some broad yet small dialogue in the "Ancestor Worship/Animism" section before going straight into its sub headings.

Should the "dito" sub heading have these " ? Im not sure its nessary.

Remove wiki links to single random years like 1951.

There are spelling mistakes, check the words carefully, if you struggle with spelling i dont mind helping, let me know.

Ok thats enough for now, get that sorted and you will be on your way. If you need more advise contact be directly. The article is on hold, so let me know when you have resolved these issues. Realist2 (talk) 02:14, 3 April 2008 (UTC)[reply]

FAILED

No improvements made, article doesnt reach criteria.Realist2 (talk) 22:48, 9 April 2008 (UTC)[reply]