Talk:Selena Live!/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Wizardman (talk · contribs) 19:11, 25 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]

I'll review this article shortly. Wizardman _{Operation Big Bear} 19:11, 25 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Here's the issues I found:

"as part of the Selena: 20 Years of Music collection that included spoken liner notes" no idea what that means.
"Live! led Selena to win an unprecedented feat in the Tejano market," This feels rather POV and unnecessary.
"soon after Live! release." reword to "soon after the release of Live!" A bit passive, but Live!'s wouldn't look right.
"which were simultaneously in the top 5 positions" top five
"After Selena had opened her boutiques in January 1993,[7] she had decided " rm both hads, makes the prose feel crisper.
"to record a live album, while she " rm comma
"influenced with rock that centers the organ as its musical instrument foundation." not bad as is, but could be fine-tuned; took me a couple reads to figure out what it meant.
"singer for the band, Pete Astudillo." Astudillo's linked above so doesn't have to be here.
"The song describes a women" a woman
"The album remained on the chart, hovering the top 20 spots, respectively." Not sure what the sentence is meant to say; not the right usage of respectively either.
"peaked at number two before it hovered the top 10 spots " as above, feels like there's a word missing.

I'll put the article on hold, and after that I'll re-read it. Not sure whether I'll pass or fail just yet even after the above changes are made. Wizardman _{Operation Big Bear} 03:36, 27 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Done All. Best, Jona yo! ^{Selena 4 ever} 04:49, 27 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Okay, looks good. If you could fine someone to fine-tune the prose some more, I'd be willing to pass it. Right now it's not quite at GA-level but not bad enough to fail. Wizardman _{Operation Big Bear} 16:13, 27 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]

User:Tbhotch‎ recently c/e the article for me. I believe its now up to GA level. Best, Jona yo! ^{Selena 4 ever} 21:00, 28 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Looks good now, so I'll pass the article. Wizardman _{Operation Big Bear} 19:53, 30 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]