Talk:Severo Aguilar/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Sammi Brie (talk · contribs) 05:46, 23 March 2023 (UTC)

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

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I'd been hoping someone would have picked this up by now so that the DYK and GA reviewers were not the same. Alas, we're here six months later. Not much to be done, though I'd like to see a passage reworded.

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a. (prose, spelling, and grammar):

   One suggestion to rework a sentence with four commas.

   b. (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a. (reference section):

   b. (citations to reliable sources):

   It was established at DYK six months ago that the Google Groups republication of the La Razón article was the only available copy.

   c. (OR):

   d. (copyvio and plagiarism):

   See the note about possibly rewording one passage. The material all appears in the cited sources.

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a. (major aspects):

   Just want to make sure there's nothing on him post-2015.

   b. (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.

   a. (images are tagged and non-free content have non-free use rationales):

   CC-BY beadshot

   b. (appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Overall:

   Pass/fail:

   Not much to do, just some things to be done. And it's been six months, so who knows what fresh eyes will find.

(Criteria marked are unassessed)

Copy changes

• During the 2003 gas conflict, Aguilar led mobilizations against the government of Gonzalo Sánchez de Lozada, rejecting the sale of natural gas to Chile and calling for the convocation of a constituent assembly to reform the Constitution, two demands that proved successful in the ensuing years. I wonder if with all these commas the last comma should be an emdash/endash.

•  Done Krisgabwoosh (talk) 22:31, 23 March 2023 (UTC)

• Is there any information on Aguilar's activities after 2015?

• None that I could find. Many individuals who entered parliament as organizational representatives rather than party partisans don't tend to lead publicly active lives once out of office. Krisgabwoosh (talk) 22:31, 23 March 2023 (UTC)

One other thing. The passage from Romero Ballivián Las dificultades que tuvo la Asamblea para redactar la Constitución, el prolongado empantamiento alrededor de las cuestiones procedimentales y el limitado debate sobre asuntos medulares restringieron la proyección de liderazgos desde ese escenario. Aproximadamente un décimo de los asambleístas prosiguió una carrera política nacional is remarkably close to Throughout the Constituent Assembly's existence, prolonged procedural stalemate and limited debate made it difficult for most constituents to project a national image, leading few to continue political careers following its closure.. I see that the book states, Se autoriza la reproducción total o parcial del contenido con la debida inclusión y cita de la fuente. We have the citations, but I wonder if there could be some rephrasing here.

• Reworded. Its still a bit close, but no longer word-for-word. Krisgabwoosh (talk) 22:31, 23 March 2023 (UTC)

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