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Reviewer: Jens Lallensack (talk · contribs) 23:05, 31 December 2021 (UTC)
Will read soon! --Jens Lallensack (talk) 23:05, 31 December 2021 (UTC)
- who procured the syntype specimens. – maybe too technical for the lead? What about "who procured the specimens that formed the bases for the description"?
- Done. FunkMonk (talk) 23:34, 1 January 2022 (UTC)
- Swinburne Ward – in the lead, I would add "British civil commissioner" as well, as it provides context and helps with understanding.
- Presented him and Newton in the intro for consistency. FunkMonk (talk) 23:34, 1 January 2022 (UTC)
- cateau vert – which language? European or local?
- I know it's French, though the source doesn't state so, "vert" is green, but I don't know what "cateau" means, can't find meanings relating to birds when I search online. I do know the local name of the echo parakeet is also "cateau vert", and the Seychelles black parrot was "cateau noir", so I assume "cateau" meant some sort of parrot back then at least... FunkMonk (talk) 23:38, 1 January 2022 (UTC)
- The American ornithologist James L. Peters used the name Psitacula wardi – single "t" intended?
- Yikes, no, fixed this in three (!) places. FunkMonk (talk) 23:34, 1 January 2022 (UTC)
- replacing the genus name Palaeornis with Psittacula. – Maybe give some context on Psittacula (reader needs to know that there are living species inside, and where they live).
- Added "wherein he also classified other extant parakeets of Asia and Africa". FunkMonk (talk) 21:58, 3 January 2022 (UTC)
- The American ornithologist James Greenway stated in 1967 that while the Seychelles parakeet closely resembled the parrots of the Mascarene islands, it belonged in the Asiatic group that lacks a rosy collar. – Those parrots are all within Psittacula, I assume?
- Yes, but he doesn't state this outright, unfortunately. FunkMonk (talk) 21:58, 3 January 2022 (UTC)
- found the Seychelles parakeet most similar to the Alexandrine parakeet, and therefore ruled out it had colonised from Asia rather than Madagascar or the Mascarenes. – But the Alexandrine parakeet is from Asia?
- Yikes, not sure what happened there (late night editing?), replaced "ruled out" with "concluded". FunkMonk (talk) 21:58, 3 January 2022 (UTC)
- tail-feathers – I don't think we should have a "-" here?
- Removed. FunkMonk (talk) 23:34, 1 January 2022 (UTC)
- That's everything, only very little issues! Very nice article, great read. --Jens Lallensack (talk) 16:07, 1 January 2022 (UTC)
- Thanks, fixed some, and will try to fix the last, more complex issues, soon. I also added a bit more context about the history of the Seychelles to the extinction section if you want to check it out: "The Seychelles islands were covered in thick forests when first described in 1609, and only inhabited by animals. They were settled in 1768, and native forest was subsequently destroyed, which coincided with the decline of endemic birds and the success of introduced species.". FunkMonk (talk) 23:34, 1 January 2022 (UTC)
- Addressed the rest. FunkMonk (talk) 21:58, 3 January 2022 (UTC)
- Thanks, fixed some, and will try to fix the last, more complex issues, soon. I also added a bit more context about the history of the Seychelles to the extinction section if you want to check it out: "The Seychelles islands were covered in thick forests when first described in 1609, and only inhabited by animals. They were settled in 1768, and native forest was subsequently destroyed, which coincided with the decline of endemic birds and the success of introduced species.". FunkMonk (talk) 23:34, 1 January 2022 (UTC)