Talk:Shahid Afridi/GA2

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Reviewer: Boca Jóvenes (talk · contribs) 16:18, 21 October 2022 (UTC)[reply]

I'll review this. Hope to find time over the weekend. BoJó | talk UTC 16:18, 21 October 2022 (UTC)[reply]

There has been significant improvement since the first review in 2018 which resulted in an immediate fail. I will need more time to check the sources but I'm placing the article on hold now because of concerns about the prose. There are too many short paragraphs and the lead, which should have 3–4 paragraphs, is chronologically disjointed. Some rewriting will be necessary. One thing I noticed immediately is that some sections talk about Afridi as if he is a current player. The article needs to be consistent in use of the past tense as regards his playing career. I don't do deadlines so there is no rush to make changes. Please ping me when you would like me to continue the review. It's an interesting article about a very fine player but it just needs some more oversight. Thanks. BoJó | talk UTC 19:42, 21 October 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Hi @Boca Jóvenes:, thanks for your review. I’ve tried to improve on the prose and hopefully it is fine now. If there are any more problems you see, feel free to ping me. Thanks, Hamza Ali Shah ^Talk 20:28, 21 October 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Hello, Hamza Ali Shah, and thanks for attending to this so promptly. I've read the article this morning and, after another quick look, I'm satisfied that it should now be promoted. It was actually very close yesterday. The prose and lead are fine. Coverage is particularly good with everything in scope in summary style. I'm happy with the citations and sources. There are no problems with stability, original research, POV or anything like that. Images are appropriate and I can't see any problems with them. So, all in all, this is a good article. I'll do the necessary at GA. Well done.

Boom, boom! BoJó | talk UTC 12:51, 22 October 2022 (UTC)[reply]