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Reviewer: Ssven2 (talk · contribs) 08:26, 17 January 2018 (UTC)
I will review this article. Thank you. — Ssven2 Looking at you, kid 08:26, 17 January 2018 (UTC)
- Comments
- Wikilink "drifter" to the correct link for those who may not be aware of its meaning.
- "enlisting the help of prostitute DQ" — "enlisting the help of a prostitute Donna Quintano".
- "At a bus stop in a rough part of town," — Name of town? and also the "rough part"? (At least clarify why the name is not given in the film if it isn't mentioned in it)
- Neither is revealed, unfortunately. However, it's unlikely not in an American town considering this movie had been shot in Canada as you may have read already.
- What do you mean by "lactating prostitute"? Just prostitute would suffice anyhow.
- Apart from having sex with her customers, she also breastfeed them. The villain, though, has referred to her as a wet nurse at one point, but I have deleted "lactating" per your concern.
- Ooh, kinky. Mama. ;-)
- "Smith takes Rutledge hostage; Hertz and Hammerson to appear." — Doesn't quite make sense here. Do clarify and tweak the sentence.
give it a copyedit if you believe the text could be tightened
- "live rounds" is informal. Any other formal word like "bullets"/"bombs"?
- "took place in Toronto and took fifty-five days" — write this as "took place in Toronto and lasted for fifty-five days" to avoid repetition of "took".
- Try expanding the reception section and describe the critics' opinion of the performances of the cast and the technical aspects.
Doing...
- Wikilink Variety in reference number 25.
Good work on the article, Slightlymad. Address these comments and the article is promoted. — Ssven2 Looking at you, kid 09:26, 17 January 2018 (UTC)
GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria
- Is it reasonably well written?
- Is it factually accurate and verifiable?
- A. Has an appropriate reference section:
- B. Citation to reliable sources where necessary:
- C. No original research:
- A. Has an appropriate reference section:
- Is it broad in its coverage?
- A. Major aspects:
- B. Focused:
- A. Major aspects:
- Is it neutral?
- Fair representation without bias:
- Fair representation without bias:
- Is it stable?
- No edit wars, etc:
- No edit wars, etc:
- Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
- A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content:
- B. Images are provided if possible and are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:
- A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content:
- Overall: Passed, my queries were met and solved by the nominator.
- Pass or Fail:
- Pass or Fail:
Great job, Slightlymad. Keep up the good work. — Ssven2 Looking at you, kid 11:54, 17 January 2018 (UTC)