Jump to content

Talk:Sigismund Báthory/GA1

Page contents not supported in other languages.
From Wikipedia, the free encyclopedia

GA Review

[edit]

Article (edit | visual edit | history) · Article talk (edit | history) · Watch

Reviewer: Sturmvogel 66 (talk · contribs) 17:55, 3 February 2017 (UTC)[reply]


I'll get to this shortly.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 17:55, 3 February 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Sturmvogel 66, have you had a chance to read the article? I will not have time to address your concerns for a couple of days after 15th March. Borsoka (talk) 15:54, 5 March 2017 (UTC)[reply]
  • No DABs
  • Need a source for File:Zsgmondbáthory.jpg. hu.wikipedia is not satisfactory
  • Too much detail in the lede; remember it's supposed to be a summary. Forex, remove his parentage from the lede while still explaining who Stephen Bathory is.
  • Stephen Báthory took charge of Sigismund's education.[9] He confirmed the position of Sigismund's Jesuit tutors, János Leleszi and Gergely Vásárhelyi. Combine these two sentences
  • Stephen Báthory died on 13 December 1586.[11] Sigismund adopted the title of prince of Transylvania. and these
  • He did not accept the offer, especially because he did not want

Suggest "mainly" instead of "especially"

  • The Diet was again convoked in late 1588 suggest "summoned" instead of "convoked"
  • Capitalize King when used like King of X
  • Transylvania of the Hungarian Crown "from" not "of"
  • All but one murdered noblemen Suggest "executed" not "murdered"
  • Explain who Aaron the Tyrant was on first mention
  • György Borbély, Ban of Karánsebes, invaded the Ottoman territories.[45] He captured Lippa (now Lipova in Romania) and fortresses along the Maros River before the end of August. Combine these two sentences
  • Rudolph II promised Sigismund to send reinforcements and money to continue the war against the Ottomans.[58][59] Sigismund returned to Transylvania on 4 March. And these ones as well
  • He did not trust his own supporters.[77] He referred to them as "intoxicated and brutish sons of a bitch" and asked István Csáky to help him to leave their camp on 2 July. And these
  • Nicely done.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 01:47, 14 March 2017 (UTC)[reply]